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DreamSeeker
Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72


0 posted 2000-11-19 02:31 AM


Can You
  Make
Yourself
   A Song

Floating Above
The City You
Your Melody
Floating Phraseology

Dipping Diving Soaring
Through Nights Eyes Skies

Can You
  Make
Yourself
   A Dream

Where Impossibilities
Merge To Define Each
Forming Faces On Places
Concepts Carved In Concrete

Can You
  Make
Yourself
   Pure Aspiration

A Book A letter A Sneeze
Comet Magnet Cloud Stream
A Fear A Passion A Believer
AllUnseen Propelled By Belief

Can You
  Make
Yourself...


© Copyright 2000 DreamSeeker - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2000-11-19 04:59 AM


Dreamseeker,
Welcome to passions,
Can you dream dreams and write poetry? You certainly can!
Write on
Kethry


Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed?
Rex E. Alford

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2000-11-19 05:24 AM


Boy you went right up through Van Allen's Belt and back to earth again ...great ideas.. I like how you end it with the most important question of all.."can you make yourself..."
Enjoyed this very much....ethome

Beki
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-11-19 06:26 AM


very nice...wonderful challenges presented here...and I love the way you ended it  
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-11-19 06:34 AM


Dreamseeker...
welcome...

this is a lovely first entry...I hope you can discover some of your dreams here - in this place of dreaming..

K

Please check your email for a special welcome...

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
5 posted 2000-11-19 07:30 AM


DreamSeeker, if you are going to lend your imagination to us, then we will be able to answer and be all of your queries...

thank you!

Welcome to Passions!  Check your e-mail for a special message!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Celeste
Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597

6 posted 2000-11-19 07:37 AM


Can You Make Yourself
Real
Awaken Soul Within
The Petals Slowly Open
Life Flows Free

I loved it.   Thrilled to see you here!  Will look forward to reading more from you....


To capture and live a moment is truly living

Eowyn
New Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 7
Malaysia
7 posted 2000-11-19 07:59 AM


It's wonderful... especially the ending
I love it!! =)
Eowyn

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-11-19 11:43 AM


dreamseeker-
welcome to passions! it is so lovely
to see all these new faces being added
to our family. this is excellent...loved
the format and word choice in this one.
especially loved the last verse! take
care.
~amy~  

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
9 posted 2000-11-19 01:29 PM



Great entrance! Welcome to Passions and I'm
looking forward to many posts from you in
the future...your work shows the heart and
soul of a natural weave  


You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

Marsha
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
10 posted 2000-11-19 01:46 PM


Dreamseaker, welcome, this is a beautiful entrance, I think you have found your natural home. Wonderful work.
Take care
                 Marsha
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

kaile
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Member Ascendant
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
singapore
11 posted 2000-11-29 12:40 PM


hi, a belated welcome and a comment that your style of poetry is certainly most unique and original...will try to read more
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
12 posted 2000-12-29 06:45 PM


Can You
  Make
Yourself
   A Dream

Where Impossibilities
Merge To Define Each
Forming Faces On Places
Concepts Carved In Concrete

enjoyed your words...*s

~Wynter



"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Charisma
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Member Ascendant
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906
lost in blue pages
13 posted 2000-12-29 06:55 PM


wonderful dreams....and one day dreams will be true.

wonderful entrance.

Charisma

Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
14 posted 2000-12-29 07:01 PM


I found this gem lingering here..just wanted to tell you how much I liked your poem.  
Mother_Earth
Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan
15 posted 2000-12-29 08:24 PM


Boy, is this great.  So few words and they say so much.  Will look for more.
           Welcome,
              ME

EagleOne
Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
16 posted 2000-12-29 10:35 PM


A belated welcome from me too! This is just a fabulous piece. The words, the thoughts, the format, I love it!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.



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