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Shadows in the night (AKA-Reunion)
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Shadows in the night (AKA-Reunion) |
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LoveBug
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This poem is about a (sort-of) revolution to a love that begun over a year ago. It never really ended, but... well, I sleep once more. I awake in the night Heart pounding, hands shaking, mind reeling Shadows dance upon my walls once again Shadows of the past Do a waltz around my room Screaming at me, bringing me from my sleep “Remember me? I was your friend Until you wanted to become much more You frightened me, and now I’m gone” I remember… now he’s just a shadow “Remember me? We grew up together Best of friends, we were! But I took a different path You didn’t stop me” I know… and now She is nothing but illusion “Remember us? We were great together But we wrecked on their “third wheel”, didn’t we?” They waltz together on my wall, together once more in my nightmares I pray to God to stop the pain To make these shadows vanish But they only dance faster They begin to spin Round and round they go Faster And Faster And Faster With each beat of my heart, I hear their screams “remember me?” “remember me?” “you see what you’ve done?" “YOU CAN'T FORGET!” My head spins, my sight fades And suddenly, they freeze The shadows stop, and step aside And then I see him… He is no dark shadow No vague outline of what once was He is real… His golden hair shines, lighting the room His icy blue eyes pierce my soul And his voice penetrates the darkness “Remember me? The mad chases The wistful looks, the bad poetry? The thoughts that haunted you at night? Well, I remember you. Believe it or not, I remember you Here I am for one last glimpse” I approach, not believing I look into those eyes So beautifully blue… I see something in them Something I’ve never seen in the eyes of any other I still can’t name it All I know is that, when he vanished He took the shadows with him And I sleep once more "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, this is an incredibly powerful piece my friend...the last line is also the perfect way to end it...wonderful work, this is awesome!  *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Great piece of writing here, Erica! You can almost hear the torment of the thoughts. Definetly a great piece, and I loved that ending, great way to end it. Abrahm Simons "I'm not sick, but I'm not well, and I'm so hot, cause I'm in Hell." - Harvey Danger |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Thank you both for your wonderful replies. You are great writers and your opinion means a lot to me. I'm going to "cheat" and give this piece a little *bump*! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Wow wonderful writing. very strong poem. love and light, Richard |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This is extremely powerful! I could imagine the whole thing happening. Good work. |
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