Open Poetry #11 |
compose me a dream |
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
write me to sleep compose me a dream sing me a sonnet of true love supreme lull me with prose till sleep overtakes me hold me till morning with sweet senryu wake me shower me gently with wet haiku kisses let passion embrace me fulfilling my wishes we'll pen a duet with the ink of our hearts and free-verse our way through the difficult parts when nightfall returns with its soft moonlight gleam just sing me a sonnet compose me a dream ~vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Oh I love this piece - it has a wonderful flow to it - well written Roniece |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Vicky* This is absolutely beautiful...the flow was perfect and the message sang a song so beautiful that even angels couldn't do it justice...Truly this is my favorite of yours...and as your work continues to grow I reserve the right to update my choice as needed Exquisite writing~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Simply beautiful. Great work |
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Blackdrake Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 83Depends on the day :) |
This is truly a Wonderful work . Mysterious is the shadow walking down the path of light. ~~ ¥ ~~ |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Looks like someone's going to be busy, Vicky. Very pretty, though. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
vlraynes, Beautifully written. Every word put together to form a wonderful message. "when nightfall returns with its soft moonlight gleam just sing me a sonnet compose me a dream" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ Just a delight ! An absolute delight. Yeppers ! You're growing alright ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey! this is awesome tricks!! i love this one..this is my new favorite of yours! and you know, those lines about free-verse, thats my favorite few lines very cool..very full of ...of..the stuff poetry should be made of... (well..you know, after that fire poem i read, i'm a little lost for words tonite...lol!!) but really..i like this one ..a lot! wonderful write tricks!! hugs, g "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
vicky this is very creative and lovely... a clever idea to incorporate all the elements of poetry. a wonderful way to express the emotions and longing of the dream well done girlie girl jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
wow! really loved this! a perfectly rythmic read from start to finish... -Tier |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love this..very creative vicky.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Roniece- thanks so much. glad you enjoyed this. Holly- wow...thanks so much, my sweet friend. my smile is too big for my face right now..lol. your kind comments are greatly appreciated and that you are calling this one your favorite of mine really means alot to me. big hugs to you, my friend. Alan- thank you...glad you like. BlackDrake- glad you enjoyed this. thanks so much for reading. Marilyn- LOL @ you....yeppers...it does look that way doesn't it... so glad you enjoyed. hugs to you, friend. Daniel- i always appreciate your kind words. thank you so much, my friend. Marge- I LOVE your enthusiastic reply! thank you for 'you're growing...' you've put a big smile on this face. love and hugs to you. dg- lol @ you and that fire poem.. really glad you like this one so much... and i like the 'free-verse' part as well. i appreciate your enthusiasm. love and hugs to you...you feel a bit chilled there...why don't you go read that fire sonnet again...lol. love ya bunches.. Janet Marie- i always love hearing from you... thanks so much for the kind words. really glad you enjoyed. hugs to you, my friend. Tier- thanks so much for the enthusiastic reply. really happy you enjoyed it. Victoria- thanks much! i really appreciate your replies. glad you enjoyed. thanks again all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
hey.. my turn.. WOW! just how much do i love this? so much I'm going to read it again.. I love that.. "wet haiku kisses" ohhh this is good! love it.. ;-) Snow |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wake in the slumber of poetic grace With a thousand kisses upon your face Dream of dances written and played for you As the night lends to sigh to morning's dew Rest not til the sun embraces midnight's moon Come tomorrow you will wake to a tender tune Gently cuddle to the music this one will send As the music will dance to a forever friend |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
vlraynes You seem to have composed a dream so well yourself. Great job Rich |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
snow- thanks for the enthusiasm, my friend.. yep...those wet haiku kisses can be fun..lol. really glad you enjoyed this. Mark- huge smiles you have put on this face.. i always LOVE your poetic responses, and this one is simply beautiful.. thank you, my friend.. love and hugs to you.. Rich- thanks so much...glad you enjoyed.. thanks again all, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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