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From Far Beyond |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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We'll do our best to put our broken pieces back again. It may take years - takes work and things don't always go as planned But it gets so much easier when someone lends a hand (From Balladeer’s ‘The Vase’) ***** Urgently hurt I remember floating, I’d lost my wings, but they were only gossamer anyway. There was nothing of substance in that shuffle I mistook for flight. It all became apparent, on the night I slept out in the garden, under stars and wailing leaves. Oh, I was in a room, under covers and warded by the dark safety of a crippled lightbulb, but I felt the grass, and the subtlety of air about my face. I think the moon reflected from my mouth as it opened and I bled a groan. I held my brokeness in two hands, lying in the earth, my arms clutched around myself, and my senses lost. Shivering I awoke, alone. Out of reach of comfort. I awoke, I stood and in the corner of the room I touched the leaves, tangled in my hair. A dream and the truth are one and the same. Pain rises, like heat, like shadows in the distance. I swallow things carefully – rays of sun, milk, things that keep me walking, voices and words. Huddled though, I stave cries away, only to have them arch out of me, in unguarded moments. I’m quite defenceless inside, unable to speak plainly, or shudder out this tragedy. How the spread of futility has washed over, snared, and I think how I could drown. Yes, tears, they don’t come often. They ache out in drips, tiny things and stop, drying on my cheeks. I, curled down, solitaired, unwound as I heard your gentle intrusion. You took my hand, from far beyond, and spoke the things I never could. You’ve been my voice, and held me as a child. This bruised creature, grounded, wanders through trees as pain rises yet you’re there, my protection, garlanded. ~For P~ [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-11-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible expression Kamla ... powerful writing and exquisite wording. You held me captivated throughout this read ... so very emotional ... beautifully done!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Only gossamer"... so life's flight is all an real illusion.... or is it illusory reality?... I like this, K...  |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Oh, how lovely...I really enjoyed this read... So much that I read it over and over again..Just beautiful, Severn...Loved it. ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
K...this is a stunning portrayal of pain and turmoil. Gorgeous writing! "I held my brokeness in two hands..." You made me feel the ache. HUGS |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this seemed ripped from the headlines of your heart Kam very nice yuh |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Severn, little K...you don't mind if I put this in my library, to see where your inspiration comes from and to marvel at your growth? Ah Ha! Thanks! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Urgently hurt I remember floating, I’d lost my wings, but they were only gossamer anyway. There was nothing of substance in that shuffle I mistook for flight. It all became apparent, on the night I slept out in the garden, under stars and wailing leaves. Oh, I was in a room, under covers and warded by the dark safety of a crippled lightbulb, but I felt the grass, and the subtlety of air about my face. I think the moon reflected from my mouth as it opened and I bled a groan. I held my brokeness in two hands, lying in the earth, my arms clutched around myself, and my senses lost. Shivering I awoke, alone. Out of reach of comfort. I awoke, I stood and in the corner of the room I touched the leaves, tangled in my hair. A dream and the truth are one and the same. ================== I, curled down, solitaired, unwound as I heard your gentle intrusion. You took my hand, from far beyond, and spoke the things I never could. You’ve been my voice, and held me as a child. This bruised creature, grounded, wanders through trees as pain rises yet you’re there, my protection, garlanded. ================= oh my ... my goodness ... my words seem suddenly so inadequate ... K, my butterfly slipper sharer .. this is exceptional... right before our eyes.. a tired, singed and tattered moth weaves a cocoon and grows herself new wings ... emerging as a luna laced winged beauty. truly excellent writing. jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kamla, I have read this three times, one aloud, just to hear the beauty of the words. I don't know what to say..it is so powerful and yet so fragile and emotional. This is what is truly known as a poem to touch the heart and, if I had even the tiniest part in its creations, I am blessed. Thank you, my wonderful friend..... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla--this is the fragile and the stong you...a look inside your true feeling...and what a loving tribute to a friend...it is overwhelmingly beautiful! Hugs! |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Love you Kamla (L) (K) bat |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sigh, a beautiful tribute for a beautiful friend. Your writing is just wonderous Kamla Dear. Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Kit - Thankyou for reading...it was a hard write, hard to put together into thought and feeling...and I appreciate your words Nan - LOL...is it both - depending on where you stand maybe? Thanks hon... LL - I find that rereads are one of the biggest compliments a poet can receive...thankyou for yours... Karen - no need to make me feel it. You understand it dear. Thanks for your giant hug - I felt that.. Walty - thankye...ripped indeed - that pretty much says it... Kari - mind? MIND? I'm honoured...and you knew I would be right? Thankyou...muchly. JM - you are right, dear, about those new wings. They're half formed...but they're a-coming...thank you, for your very kind appreciation. 'Deer - I feel quite humbled. I'm just glad I found 'The Vase' with that verse in it to steal lol...no thanks necessary...goodness! HUGS...thankYOU. Martie - you know what words like that mean...especially when they come from one of my favourite writers....thankyou. P - Well my friend. This is, as you know, for you. I mean it (Dad-type person heh). Without you...this time would've been worse. Thankyou - from the depths. (L)(K)bat back.. Mmy - Hugs you. You also - without you ... yup, might not have made it lol. Your support is one of my foundations. You can have a bat too... K |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
HUSG from me |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Simply amazing, this poem. I have to save it, I can come up with no other words. Take care. Sandra |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Cindy...thankyou for you husg... They are wonderful things... Sandra - I'm honoured...really. Thankyou. I think you know this kind of pain quite well. Have a hug... K |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
K, the words escape me right now. . . this is absolutely beautiful. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kamla, I read this several times and I'm still trying to absorb its impact. So real, so heartachingly real and so desperately lovely Write on Kethry. Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Good Lord woman, the pain in this piece makes me want to get my butt on a plane and come hug you personally ... electronic hugs just don't seem to cut it here ... But as much as I'd love to visit NZ, I'm flat broke and I have the feeling Michael wouldn't let me go without taking him anyway, and what fun would that be...? hehehe You know that I love your verse, Kamla, but here, I felt it -- and it was not a good feeling. I'm sorry that you had inspiration of this kind ... but I am ecstatic that you had Philip to lend you his hanky. Best wishes, --Linda < !signature--> Remember: maintaining a positive attitude may not solve all your problems, but it will certainly annoy enough people to make it worth the effort. [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 12-17-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes this poem touches ones heart...softly..James |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sven...How I know that feeling...I've been so poetically dry lately...but I know that isn't what you meant - thanks.. Kethry - I really appreciate your comment...hugs...desperately lovely - an unusual choice of words, and ones that ring true for me. Thankyou... Linda - You have no idea how your words touched me...nearly in tears lol. (Pathetic woman etc...) Philip has nice hankies btw - should you ever need them (but I doubt it, with Michael around ~grin~) They're monogrammed...HAHA. Thanks hon, thanks much. James - glad to have touched you...and thankyou for your appreciation. K |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
SIGH !!! Michael |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yet you’re there, my protection, garlanded. the entire piece is stunning......it is a treasure "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Anytime Kamla, day or night I am here for you Thanks for the bat  love and hugs Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
When things happen that cause us to step outside of ourselves and look around-- that can be quite frightening, and it is always a comfort to have a soft place to lie down and rest knowing there is someone helping to watch over you. I will lend you my eyes. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
...you might find I don't want to give them back though... Thankyou - for these beautiful beautiful words - more feeling than thought indeed.  K...and I have found a lifetime can be lived in one moment... |
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