Open Poetry #11 |
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how i turn ugly (just a image that consumed my mind) |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore ![]() |
Rows of sweet smelling brightly lit candles around us, Soaked in a red vine ocean, we drink and make merry and i toast to you, my lovely friend the ground rumbles beneath us a giant hole opens up to swallow us and frantic, i turn to you for help, secure of the fact that you wont desert me but you are gone only a snake lies before me, its hissing tongue sharp and pointed, intimidating doom at this scarecrow, Its ugly features register no emotion as it hits the snake repeatedly on the head diluting the vine with dark red blood and the candles topple over and the hungry flames roar, waiting waiting to devour more... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
kaile, this is absolutely surreal...reads like one of nightmares (and I mean that as a compliment, btw..lol) a very vivid, visual piece of work here. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, Nightmarish images for sure! These images jump out at you and leave an unsettling feeling (it is only a bad dream, it is only a bad dream). There! I feel better already! Graphic images congered up here! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanx serenity and dennis for replying...this is different from my usual style but im glad both of you liked ![]() |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
It's different all right...powerful imagery...terrific write! Nathan |
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kindasorta Member
since 2000-12-02
Posts 56 |
lol..... where are the homeowners claim forms?? ![]() prutty descrpt images here and gives one something to comtemplate when the ground rumbles and a hole opens up---RUN! RUN! ![]() |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
kaile--The images indeed are very vivid. Wonderful write. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
YIKES!!!!!!! really vivid dark stuff here... great writing |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Kaile, do you mean vine as in grapevines or wine as in red wine?? ![]() I know what you mean here. Underneath these metaphors, I think you're talking about how you become as 'dirty' and 'bad' as the next person just to prevent yourself from being 'eaten alive' by him. Don't worry about it though, coz this is just a form of defence mechanism that most of us will build up to prevent harm from coming to ourselves. We're human afterall. ![]() _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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