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The Piano |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas 
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The piano plays me in my sleep. The notes sing to me red and purple hues. It draws me at midnight when the sun is gone. I dance for it like a puppet drawn by invisible strings. I am it’s keys. It is my soul and I weep for it’s mournful rhythms. My chest heaves while high notes sound whirling me around like a ballerina who has lost her grace. Black notes ache inside of my body where bass notes take away my will. I dance for the piano away from the light the music holding me in darkness tight and demanding. Fingers moving across the keys and across my spine in perfect tune with the blue black harmony of hunger. My hands bleed with music so jagged it leaves my heart in tatters and my eyes ragged with the strain of blindly caressing beautiful sound. I’m twisted upon myself in and out of this faithless world moving in circles to confess a wish to be a part of the night outside of the light dancing forever to a song that heaven has denied and hell cannot recognize. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Saxoness? YOU ROCK....that last stanza? totally swept me away....you just blew serenity away! LOL..and truly, most awesome writing m'friend! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Thanks 'renity. This is the result of listening to the Matrix soundtrack all evening lol. But I like it. And I love the paino. What an instrument! Thanks again. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
WOw I liked this poem very much. Lots of feelings it brought to me. Great writing. Love and light, Richard |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Richard, it brought lots of feeling to me too. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
are yuh musically inclined cuz this gots alotta great notes to it yuh |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is lovely, and I would go sit at my piano now...so torn am I between the notes of the keys and the notes left for me to read... This is very nice... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love it..nicely written indeed..HUGS ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
BRAVO!! I have a special place in my heart for piano....oh, I loved this! "Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version of someone else." Marilyn Monroe |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Walt: I do love music. I can sing and play a bit, and it doesn't sound half bad, even though Desperdao holds his ears every time I begin.  Sunshine: I have my keyboard a few feet from me....such choices! lol thanks for the comments Thanks Victoria!  Rose, I think everyone should have the same opinion. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Saxoness, Beautiful illustration of how music can mirror life at times. I think the piano is very soothing. Nice writing. Lone Wolf< !signature--> Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 12-10-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully expressed! Wonderful job! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
that would be the song of earth. . . superb poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful feeling brought on my such a beautiful instament...it takes my breath away too...and you expressed it so well! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Thank you everyone so so much for the comments. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Awesome, awesome, awesome, did I say awesome..this was superb I would love to show this to my music teacher if you don't mind... wow you have to be musician..or should be!! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
lol, yes, be my guest! Show this to whomever you like. Well, I can play heart and soul on the key board...does that count? "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
definately a most wonderful poem. it totally blew me away as well. the rhythm was solid and the word selection was as near to perfect as could possibly be in my opinion. congrats boo. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is really nice...makes me wish once again that I could play the piano...James |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Thanks James. I wish I could play the piano better. If wishing were reality... "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
. My chest heaves while high notes sound whirling me around like a ballerina who has lost her grace. Black notes ache inside of my body where bass notes take away my will. Thanks for telling me about this poem, really enjoyed the read. especially loved the above verse "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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