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Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

0 posted 2000-12-10 01:02 AM

The piano plays me
in my sleep.
The notes sing to me
red and purple hues.
It draws me at midnight
when the sun is gone.
I dance for it
like a puppet drawn
by invisible strings.

I am it’s keys.
It is my soul and I
weep
for it’s mournful rhythms.

My chest heaves
while high notes sound
whirling me around
like a ballerina who has
lost
her grace.
Black notes ache
inside of my body where
bass notes take
away my will.

I dance for the piano
away from the light
the music holding me
in darkness tight
and demanding.
Fingers moving across
the keys and across
my spine
in perfect tune
with the blue black
harmony of hunger.

My hands bleed with
music so jagged
it leaves my heart in
tatters and my eyes ragged
with the strain of blindly
caressing beautiful sound.

I’m twisted upon myself
in and out of this faithless
world moving in circles to
confess a wish to be a part
of the night
outside of the light
dancing forever to a song
that heaven
has denied and
hell
cannot recognize.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-12-10 01:18 AM

Saxoness? YOU ROCK....that last stanza? totally swept me away....you just blew serenity away! LOL..and truly, most awesome writing m'friend!

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

2 posted 2000-12-10 09:29 AM

Thanks 'renity. This is the result of listening to the Matrix soundtrack all evening lol. But I like it. And I love the paino. What an instrument!

Thanks again.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

maxtec1
Senior Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 577
Garland, Tx

3 posted 2000-12-10 09:31 AM

WOw I liked this poem very much. Lots of feelings it brought to me. Great writing.
Love and light,
Richard

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

4 posted 2000-12-10 02:23 PM

Richard, it brought lots of feeling to me too.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

5 posted 2000-12-10 03:23 PM

are yuh musically inclined cuz this gots alotta great notes to it yuh

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2000-12-10 03:58 PM

This is lovely, and I would go sit at my piano now...so torn am I between the notes of the keys and the notes left for me to read...

This is very nice...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2000-12-10 05:14 PM

i love it..nicely written indeed..HUGS

~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2000-12-10 05:15 PM

BRAVO!!

I have a special place in my heart for piano....oh, I loved this!

"Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version
of someone else." Marilyn Monroe

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

9 posted 2000-12-10 07:13 PM

Walt: I do love music. I can sing and play a bit, and it doesn't sound half bad, even though Desperdao holds his ears every time I begin.

Sunshine: I have my keyboard a few feet from me....such choices! lol thanks for the comments

Thanks Victoria!

Rose, I think everyone should have the same opinion.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2000-12-10 07:19 PM

Saxoness,

Beautiful illustration of how music can mirror life at times. I think the piano is very soothing. Nice writing.

Lone Wolf< !signature-->

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

11 posted 2000-12-10 07:33 PM

Very beautifully expressed! Wonderful job!

Denise

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

12 posted 2000-12-10 10:49 PM

that would be the song of earth. . .

superb poem. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2000-12-10 11:43 PM

Wonderful feeling brought on my such a beautiful instament...it takes my breath away too...and you expressed it so well!

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

14 posted 2000-12-11 03:07 PM

Thank you everyone so so much for the comments.

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

artsygrl
Member

since 2000-11-17

Posts 55
Florida

15 posted 2000-12-12 06:14 PM

Awesome, awesome, awesome, did I say awesome..this was superb I would love to show this to my music teacher if you don't mind...
wow you have to be musician..or should be!!

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

16 posted 2000-12-26 08:52 PM

lol, yes, be my guest! Show this to whomever you like. Well, I can play heart and soul on the key board...does that count?

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

desperado
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx

17 posted 2001-01-27 03:03 AM

definately a most wonderful poem. it totally blew me away as well. the rhythm was solid and the word selection was as near to perfect as could possibly be in my opinion. congrats boo.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

18 posted 2001-01-27 05:00 AM

This is really nice...makes me wish once again that I could play the piano...James

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

19 posted 2001-02-22 11:27 PM

Thanks James. I wish I could play the piano better. If wishing were reality...

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

20 posted 2001-06-01 03:22 PM

.

My chest heaves
while high notes sound
whirling me around
like a ballerina who has
lost
her grace.
Black notes ache
inside of my body where
bass notes take
away my will.

Thanks for telling me about this poem, really enjoyed the read. especially loved the above verse

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

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