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Could it Have Been the Grinch?
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Could it Have Been the Grinch? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Could it Have Been the Grinch? Virginia Salter Strings of lights lie across littered carpet, baubles strewn amid a tell-tale scene, who could have been so cruel; who could have been so mean? Tinsel sparkles its reminder of the joy at memory's awesome view, just before we kissed good night and till morn we bid adieu. Slumbering so peacefully for a moment we awoke amid the night of dreams a distant noise our slumber broke. Silence again ensued as clock glowed half past two we rolled over one more time, a gentle caress a kiss or two. Arising to the morning, crawling from our slumber, you went to brew the coffee as I lumbered toward the nurs’ry. She’s gone, she’s gone!!! She’s not in her bed! What was that noise within the night? The one that rose my head! Running in my wide awake, to seek your thoughts and grip. Running to escape this fear as tears fell on my lip. Then I find the both of you one sleeping in a pile of Christmas bears and candy canes the other wearing tear-stained smile. A silver ball held in her grip, little bum in the air we could only feel our love for our little baby lying there. Such a mess, such a sight, Christmas wall-to-wall as you ran for the cam’ra, out the door and down the hall. There’d be a chore, a great big chore to set it all back right, but this memory will have victory and shed our Christmas light. © December 9, 2000 This one is still a bit rough...but it was inspired by overhearing a father whose toddler had apparently crawled out of bed in the night and 'destroyed' the Christmas tree. I didn't get the particulars, clearly, so improvised. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
My heart skipped a beat as I felt a little one had been taken. Then you put things back to ticking just right. I hope the father took the turn of events as a wonderful story he could tell on someones wedding day.. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You read this exactly as I'd hoped. When I give the father this poem, I must include your remark so he can consider such a delightful idea. Thanks for reading and your comment! |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Definitely a Hall-Mark moment. Melton |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Applause! What a wonderful tale you've woven Virginia ... you had me nervous, anxious, and then ... smiling at the perfect vision you painted. I just loved this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
VAS, this is wonderful and really great write, I think this is fabulous write. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Wonderfully written poem, put a large smile on my face... I would love to see the photos, a kodak moment for sure. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Missy Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 28USA |
Beautiful poem! I was a bit scared at first, but very glad to see it turn out so joyous! I thought the loss of a child was about to come about. Glad to see it was just a mischiefious child instead! I've got a cat that has done this very thing, all I could do was laugh and cry. My 2 year old hasn't done it yet, but I see it coming, I find ornaments all over the place one by one, it's just a matter of time - the whole tree will go!!!You really brought the right feeling to this! Wonderful!!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
A silver ball held in her grip, little bum in the air we could only feel our love for our little baby lying there brought a smile to my face...wonderful story, Virginia sorry I didnt respond earlier I haven't been on much....but this was worth reading ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thank you all! You are such lovely people. I had thought that people weren't reading because of the title. That perhaps they just couldn't bear one more Grinch tale, so that's why I made my plea...and the fact that the piece was getting buried pages down. I'm so glad you liked this and I can hardly wait to show it to the father whose overheard remarks inspired this piece. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well your plea did help in my case i only wish i could have been there to witness the "hallmark moment"...great story you shared |
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