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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Too Silent Oh what emptiness there is in this silence When no music or words written will quench this drawing to memory, This yearning to touch upon anothers purity, To eat their words whole, like they are a soul's foundation Fill me, disregard the emptiness Fervent intent, passion do I crave I will not mislead myself again, reminding myself of all the whys of before Remember? Scorned this lust is ,as sinful thoughts to give, when this touch is so distant, so full of uncertainty Why do I crave it when it does not hold me? Never will I again touch in empty temptation, Unless you hold my soul like your own, but you do not know me, for you have not seen my heart fully I wanted to be known by you but I did not think you allowed it's knowing How I long to just hear your words echoed in this empty silence, in a convesation of whys but I rather hear affection uttered truly to my eyes Morning kisses and unsure remembrances I wanted to open my soul to you But he, this memory, has gone and left my body, soul, and mind and I think of another That could possibly take the place I denied him How long it has been since "I love you" has kissed its hidden taste upon me, upon my heart But he cannot take your place I need , and to need is weak And I have worked so hard to be "independently happy." Farce face of words Elixir of pacified rhetoric, Not withstanding anything except regret Nourish the affection, that does not exist say in my remembrance Do you know what love really means? does anybody? say it meaningful, but only if you mean its words, words that my mind dreams,just a chance to be seen openly I am all but a novice to these whiles love me or leave me Am I in a sense nameless? Or innocence, natural? IF you really were the one who once loved me you might know, but you are not, And he is gone existing only in romantic notions and thoughts You are as distant as your voice misinterpreting the words I write, What can words say? Could you ever know me except in heaven's grace? Do we every really know another by their emptiness? Can we really say a word as strong as a kiss? Will you taste me upon soul? every to know me for more than eyes hold? more than expectations? does real hold real? Do you know what it means to truly love? I have cried tears that I refused And now they come unrecognized even to my own eyes In this silent house time as found a friend inside... Regret -Barbara M. Brewer |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Barbara - you have spoken part of my soul with this. Many of your phrases express certain things I am feeling or have felt lately. It held me enthralled - thankyou for it.  K |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WOW..... Your poem just captured my mind and held me prisoner all the while tight strings affixed themselves around my heart... I must say I'm overwhelmed this is superbly written... coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Wow, thankyou, Severn to me there is not greater compliment than for a person to relate and feel along with a poem, thankyou very much artsygrl |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
wow, thank you ver much coco...what a wonderful compliment...like I said to Severn that is the best compliment I can get for someone to feel and become a part of the poem.. thanks again artsygrl |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Girl, you can write, keep it up, I know you are new but this is a treasure, it's poetry.....pure poetry! What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Thank You very much Irish Rose hopefully I will not be new for long, I like the page.thanks for the very kind words!!!!!!!!! |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Beautiful, just beautiful! I have felt like that more times than I'd like to remember. Your descriptive imagery just took me away. They say that "The ink from the writer's pen is like that of the tear of his eye", and this poem has touched on those tears. Keep writing!!! athena4 |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Athena...How very kind of you to reply..makes me feel good to know someone understands...on a whim I sent him the poem via email...not so sure if that was the wisest..for I really have gotten silence back,but he is busy...sigh...thanks again for the reply. Barbara |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Bravo!!! What a heart felt poem. I see reflections of myself in parts of this. Great job. Love and light, Richard |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Hey Maxtec, thanks allot for your comments..*smile...see your a new member as well, welcome to the club. Barbara |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
Hey Maxtec, thanks allot for your comments..*smile...see your a new member as well, welcome to the club. Barbara |
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