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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Deception To weep, to sigh, to lift the weary eye Upward from the depths of thought Toward tomorrow’s pondering of why Still unlearned the lessons taught Cruel deceit, the enemy of trust In all it’s dark unkind disguise Made its way from wells of selfish lust Into the harbors of my eyes It made a life to pause, a heart to weep Inducing all the grief it must Forever shall my spirit lightly sleep In shallow valleys of mistrust And so I wonder why deception reigns Fulfilling someone’s anxious want When poorer are they for their fruitful gains That flow from out the faithless font One’s cruelty will not be my demise And all my wealth they cannot take Such love surrounds and soothes these heavy eyes And only love can fortune make Elizabeth Santos |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This touched me deeply. I have felt these emotions but never described them so eloquently, grief, cruelty from others, indifference, they are wounds. In poetry, I truly believe we know one another, for the words are so hard to deceive when they come from our pens, and our hearts, and so hard to disquise. I tried once to write from someone else's expression, viewpoint, and I was almost frozen trying to feel another's emotions. I wonder if all poets feel this way and simply write from their own hearts? What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Thank you so much. This poem is timely indeed for me. It made a life to pause, a heart to weep Inducing all the grief it must Forever shall my spirit lightly sleep In shallow valleys of mistrust Trust is such a gift and when coming from the heart of honesty it is priceless without measure. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Elizabeth* Your writings always lay upon my heart with the delicate wings of angels...how I love to fall into your weaves. Excellent writing... so glad to see you here...much love to you dear poet~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Love indeed "surrounds you" Liz ... this is exceptional writing. Should you need a shoulder, you know how to reach me. Love to you my friend ... Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heart moving words, glad to see you back here, wonderful expression from your heart. (((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To weep, to sigh, to lift the weary eye Upward from the depths of thought Toward tomorrow’s pondering of why Still unlearned the lessons taught ================ One’s cruelty will not be my demise And all my wealth they cannot take Such love surrounds and soothes these heavy eyes And only love can fortune make ================ by the wisdom penned in that last verse ... me thinks you have learned the "lessons taugh" and as always...we learn them from you and your examples of grace and poetry. love to you sweet poet jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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liquidphantasy Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 15california |
Your writing is explosive with emotion, tender of heart, illustrative with vivid imagery, and perfect in structure, rhyme, & meter. Deceptiveness is one of the most cruel and jarring stabs of life. We all have been lied to, deceived, and it hurts deeply when it happens. How can we trust that it will not happen again? Simply, and unfortunately, we can't. As we grow, we realize that we can be selective in who we choose to relate to, who we select as friends or companions, making sure they know that we expect honesty and will not tolerate deceit. But, we also must be realistic and realize that people are not perfect. Forgiveness is vital, as well, because we will be lied to, we will be deceived, and without forgiveness, it is difficult to build trust. Your poem brought all of these thoughts to my mind. It hit home with me since this is an issue I am currently struggling with in my life. Thank you for posting this. You are a fine writer. This is publishable. [This message has been edited by liquidphantasy (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--Trust is priceless and can be so easily taken away, but yes, forgiveness is what gives us trust again and again, so that we may learn empathy. Very deep and powerful poem you have written...causes me to ponder things in my own life...thank you, dear friend...I'm so glad to see you posting again..Hugs! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz - You are such an incredible sage and poet. You see things in such clarity, and record them with such unbelievable talent. I don't believe I have ever read anything of yours that was anything other than perfection. Yet, you are so prolific. Loving your words is easy - you make it so. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Not only does love surround you but you are the very essence of it's rare purity in form. This has and will I am sure touch many hearts and cause many to reflect as you have not only penned of a matter that plagues us everyday, but you have given the path to seeing things so much clearly and we will all be the better for it. So very nice to find one of yours today. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Elizabeth, deception and mistrust are powerful enemys. After reading this writing, I don't believe they could be expressed any better than what you have done. BC |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I do not know who decieves - only that one such as you deserves no such deception deserves none at all - but what I do know with perfect certainty - Your writing is perfection and always speaks to me. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your web of words have caught this fly and I am willing to die. Love Sy |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Liz, hopefully you are just flexing your beautiful poetic muscles here and not speaking of life.....you have gone through enough without having another disheartening experience.....beautiful writing |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your responses are so overwhelming and interesting. I think everyone is deceived at times. I wish this poem weren't true, but I was so terribly violated and deceived the day after my husband's funeral, that I was so distraught I couldn't breath. I wrote a poem a lot stronger than this, but decided not to post it. My children have been so helpful through this ordeal. But I'm more interested that you liked the poem, and I'm smiling again, no matter what happens. I'll post a happy poem tomorrow Thank you all for the wonderful responses LIz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lizzy...I'm so sorry you had to suffer anything else, that's just terrible my friend. Hey - you know where I am should you need me right? It is wonderful to see you here again though, I must selfishly admit.  Love you dear K |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Liz- my heart goes out to you, my friend.. sending you hugs and wishes for a brighter tomorrow... hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
quote: Sorry that you were hit when you were already down  (tendency of life, I think), but you spoke of it so beautifully. I'll be looking for your happy poem tomorrow (but if you were to write a sad poem I'd look for that too. (((((hugs))))) |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I never truly saw the ugliness of greed and deception until my father passed away. It's a low blow that sends you reeling when you are most vulnerable and most in need of just the opposite. But the lessons learned were learned well...only love is the most valuable treasure that we have in this life. Thank God for my brother, sisters and the rest of my family. They are the jewels of my life. And thank God for the only true inheritence that no man can take away from us. I'm sorry that you had to suffer through this too. HUGS Love ya Denise |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Although I have not lost a husband, I lost a beloved father and mother...and afterwards the family splintered...and I believe some deception had a hand in it... I hug you my Lady Santos...and you continue to be in my prayers... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful words Elizabeth! Beautiful philosophy of truth and honesty, something the world needs a lot more of. It's so good to be reading your lines of charming wisdom and I hope you write a jillion(Paula Finn's word) more!! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I don't if I should say... but I'm lost on this one... and I'm not asking you to explain... But my heart was looking for your soul... and I was left without explanation... Sorry that's just me... dale . |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
In re-reading this, and Elizabeth, you are always in my prayers, I wanted to encourage you that poetry is a healing balm, isn't it? Even if we post or not, it heals to write.... "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Dear Liz, < !signature-->For me when things have gone so wrong the deceit usually came from those I trusted the most which made the shock and the edacity of the whole thing not even believable and that much more to endure, The Liz I know through the poetry I have had the previlege of reading and through your replys, you are strong, fair to all, trully loving to the point of rarity, and most of all wise, you said in your poem, When poorer are they for their fruitful gains That flow from out the faithless font One’s cruelty will not be my demise And all my wealth they cannot take Such love surrounds and soothes these heavy eyes And only love can fortune make they can not take that which is already yours and untouchable your heart and everything that resides there. Thier undisguisable deceit will at some point be thier own demise this is pretty much guarenteed. I send a hug and a prayer, and hope that you know we all love you for you, be well friend. "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) [This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 12-15-2000).] |
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