Open Poetry #11 |
Rain Tankas ( my first attempt) |
SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Rain comes to soothe me washing all my cares away brightening my day puddles made for splashing in it doesn't get much better ~*~ Rain calls to my heart soothing, caressing, healing offering a smile laughing as each raindrop falls how I love a rainy day ~*~ Rain hitting the roof guideing me gently to sleep like a lullaby pitter~patter, drip~drop~drip tonight I will have sweet dreams ~SEA~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my...where is my umbrella, feeling the pitter patter, drip drop..... great tanka's SEA love them all.....but not the rain. ((hugs)) Charisma ~Theresia~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Charisma~ LOL it's ok that you don't like the rain but I'm glad you liked the Tankas -SEA |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Tanka you very much You ought to move to Seattle Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
offcourse I love your tankas SEA....told you that you could do them well.... and I'm glad that I have seen them before I have to log off....have to run now. take care. Charisma ~Theresia~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
SEA-Hello, Wonderful Tankas, like the third best (i always have favorites), but enjoyed them all. Nicely done. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
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Interloper~ I'd love to, although I've been to Texas, and the storms there ROCK! thanks Charisma~ thank you PM~ Hi! I think I like the third one best too, thank you -SEA |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
SEA, Ahhh! Welcome to world of Tankas.. one of my favorite places to be I think you are a natural.. they are all beautifully done. I have to agree with Poeminister and say the third one is also my favorite.. but they are all lovely. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Very well done. Enjoyed them all, and as I would like them each seperately, they make a great "chain" tanka. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
RP25~ Hello!! thank you, I've been wanting to try these, I was hoping I did them right -SEA |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DragonPoe~ you snuck in there....... thank you so much, these were fun to do, I'm so glad you liked them! -SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
these epitomize the warm gentle rains that I love...mostly from my childhood they seldom happen where I live now, which probably makes the joy of these more profound I'm just going to have to look up the parameters of a tanka, I need forms that help me limit the length of a piece, not an easy task for me without a manufactured restriction |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
very lovely sea.. enjoyed them all... From what i have read a tanka is written by two people..the haiku by one and the last two lines added by his/her lover which makes a tanka.. Heres another one about the rain for you rain falls on the sea upon the nights salty stage dancing a tap dance behind the curtain of night practicing upon the waves i fixed it sea i had the count wrong thats what happens when you write poetry when you first open your eyes haa.. < !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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