Open Poetry #11 |
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The Fire Sonnet |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
The Fire Sonnet ![]() Oh Flame of love 'tis cruel you mock at me, And banish me from lusts I'll never know; But strong this blood so hot it craves of need, May soon be embers with the faintest glow? Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams, This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright; Dare to wish I'd be the fire that you scream! Again, Again, through every lonely night. And still I wait for one of luscious heat, Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed; Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat? Or is your hunger ready to be fed? So come and light this flame of our desire, And lay with me to feed this inner fire. James Parker Haley (c) Nov 18, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh fuel of want, where is the touch of dreams, This hunger aches at lovely eyes so bright Wish I to be the fire that you scream! Again, Again, through every lonely night. And still I wait for one of luscious heat, Whose lips and thighs would melt the coldest bed; Are you afraid to taste this sinful treat? Or is your hunger ready to be fed? So come and light this flame of desire, lay with me and feed this inner fire. ================== OH man....now your not playing fair at all p-man... hows a moth supposed to resist a flame like this ![]() jeeeeezzzzzeeee...and make it be a sonnet on top of it all... talk about no mercy *smile* good thing I stocked up on singe proof mascara *winkwink* ... BUT seriously now... this is AWESOME...you know how I admire your sonnets parker... you do this so very well... the cadence and flow is like butter and your vocabulary and verbiage is poetry in motion... and the sensuality ... well you know we're all gonna swoon to the moon ![]() very very cool imagery and theme here... so cool its hot.... excellent writing p-man..truly makes a moth's muse have such poetic envy ![]() ![]() later-flame-glow-gator me |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Haleyja, Nice writing, enjoyed the read. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is hot stuff Parker whew ...great writing ... love how the fire grows from a glow to a full fledged flame of desire ...take care... ethome |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
This was very well written,with a good closing couplet.Fine work. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
AH, Parker, leave it to you to make an ash out of yourself! I hear there's a sale on asbestos sheets at Macy's.. Actually, the sonnet is great....two syllable short of perfection...but who's counting? ![]() |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
can feel the ache and hunger in this one, Parker. Very nicely done ![]() ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, thank you brown-eye's. I never thought when I wrote it, but it has a connection to the moth to flame concept don't you think .. ![]() Seymour, thank you very much. ![]() ethome, thanks buddy. ![]() Tony, thank you and welcome to passions, and I must ask you about wales some time. ![]() Balladeer, I think your calculator is on the blink, cause since you mentioned that I've been counting and recounting... and believe me nothing is short... fire and desire had me worried but I checked them and they are ok... so prove it cause I can't find them.... ![]() nakdthoughts, thank you very much. ![]() Lighthousebob, thank you. a few hours anyway. ![]() Parker |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh James this burns...HOT < !signature-->Tracie~ ![]() Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
DAMN...! (oops..can i say that in here?..cause its all i got right now..!!) i'll be back to feel this one again.... ![]() "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Tracie, thank you.... well I do like hot. ![]() dg, you'd better... come back and feel it. ![]() ........ Balladeer, I must bow to your sharp eye's and the fact that you can count with two hands better then I. ![]() You are right, I finally found an old dictionary that told me fire was 1 and desire was 2. Those two lines were plaging me from the start. I kept adding an extra one syllible word to both and reading out loud its 11 damn why do these two lines want 11 syllibles. The flow had been ten but I kept counting 11. duh is me. ![]() Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Me thinks those lips might be too hot to kiss, darlin' Cor Nice and tight, very well written, Park. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wonderfully done, Parker, a very enjoyable read. Michael |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I love your Sonnets!!! ![]() ![]() You were made to write this kind of poetry I think. You have such a flare and rare natural talent for writing this style. ![]() Just keeps the fire away from me...us witches have had bad experiences with flames before! ![]() ![]() Marina |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Parker* Very very awesome writing...you weave a sonnet with flair and passion like no other~ Does this mean your next picture you'll be wearing a fireman's hat??? ![]() Pleeeeeeeeeeese!! You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oh god...i cant stand it..you melt me..!! when i can respond to this without the shakes, i'll say something intelligent...lol ... ![]() |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Parker- WOW...warming my hands on the computer screen now... ![]() who needs candles when i've got a built in fireplace...lol. this is just...wow...amazing. i have to echo dg...this just melts my heart... ![]() you definitely have a way with words, my friend. ![]() beautiful ![]() hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
so firepants..this is awesome..and i love it absoluely beyond words...! you write sonnets like a heart-song..and i dont care if fire and desire were the wrong syllable count..the fire rises while reading this one..and the desire..well....we wont talk about that in a family forum ![]() very wonderful write..(btw..i had to NOT read it again in order to say something sensible with my brain on this one!!) ![]() hugs, g |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
Very Impressive foray into format Difficult Applause applause The Reader Falls To Timeless All Enduring Loves Fire Burns Us All Yet All Do Seek Its Brazier No Matter Our Scares Tmidity Knows Only Passionless Hearts |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, well I doubt they could beat the fire in those eyes ![]() Michael, thank you very much. ![]() Marina, well thanks for that... but don't you carry an onboard broom extinguisher.. better get an updated model. ![]() Butterflies, thank you... so whats this facination women have with men and rubber trench coats anyway... cause they carry around a big hose... ![]() dg, that inner fire got ahold of you to eh! come a little closer. i'm a little cold this morning and need some heart. ![]() Vicky, your too kind... thank you. ![]() dg, back again me thinks you have a big fire to put out... where's my fireman hat. ![]() DreamSeeker, very nice comments thank you and welcome. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Come on baby, light my fire, come on baby light my fire, try to set the night on fire....Old song, still hot. Corinne |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
that was 'heart' or 'heat' you sd you needed..i got both baby.. ![]() and we dont need no stinking firemans hat..lets dont put out the fire..just let it burn......... !! hugs,g |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow! Excellent Parker! Such beautiful wording ... I loved the perfect flow in this piece. You've left wonderful imagery burnt into my mind, much enjoyed! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Victoria![]()
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love your fire sonnets ha..very sensuous. ![]() written with ink of passion.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, jeez and I thought that was an invite.... bummer.. ![]() dg, yeah whats that old joke... more hose more hose... ok where's the fire.. ![]() Kit, thank you, another burning comment.. things are getting just a little hot around here... ![]() Victoria, passion did you say passion... sure come get some ink then.. ![]() Parker |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Well, it looks like you've heated things up with this one. It's very good and I like the form very much. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Parker my man...now this could melt the cold off of any heart you are seeking. Lovely sonnet and yes, this cowboy was moved by it deeply, but we need not go into how much now do we? You know that I love to find a sonnet in the blue pages and when it is one penned by you then I know going in that I am going to be treated to a very special moment and you have never failed in that area at all. You shine my friend in a thousand ways. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
PV.... thanks for replying. Mark, never enough heat in this place don't you think... ![]() Parker |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow! "damn us both to fiery hell's heaven in your arms" very niiiice... -Tier |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It is a perfect sonnet ![]() |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Simply an echo, but just wanted to say "Well done." Rainydays |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
btw...this makes an AWESOME bedtime story......... ![]() g "so lift your heart with mine...the depth to which it grieves is the height to which it can celebrate!" -Lisa Hussey |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
read to me by fire's flames from memory of days gone old when passion's fire was desire and of the day when you were bold Bravo.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
~Parker~ ![]() Hello handsome! This is wonderful I could feel the heat....... whew! ![]() ~SEA |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Tiersdin, thank you. ![]() Balladeer, thanks for the backup counting. ![]() Rainydays, well then thank you for the echo. ![]() dg, now we ain't talking about sleeping here are we.. ![]() Sunshine, thank you very much for that. ![]() SEA, well thank you sexy. ![]() Parker |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Wow Park, what you can do with words is beyond belief. Into my library it goes. D Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An absolutely perfectly done sonnet! Beautiful! |
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