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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2000-12-06 09:04 PM


*hey all. i have been a terrible clod about my appearance around here. i've niether posted nor replied in as much as 2½ weeks. i'm very sorry about that and i will come and read tomorrow when i'll have plenty of time to catch up. until then i thought i'd type up this little ditty. enjoy*

*November Leaves*

Whipsers of fear take me out of my dreams
New thoughts evoked; restitch the world at the seams.
Tears under covers...
but what do They mean?
i woke to this insanity and sought Christianity,
the Smoke and the Mirrors...
the only one on the planet's me.
Teeth grind themselves to death in the dark
Cry out from abuse,
but you can't see the marks.
Through all these trials, i feel God has abandoned me
and sometimes i can't believe
why all this is happening...

i fall in November leaves,
and i question what i believe.
In this prison i've made
from the beauty and hate,
What counts is what's real
is the heart that does bleed.

Open my mind and the window and blinds,
as the moon shines her light on the truth that i find.
Lies untold and low and behold,
the night's honest winds do blow so cold.
We stay and we pray and we wait for the gates,
sittin around 'til we are judged one day.
We wait to be saved
and we label it "faith"?
All the Yes-Men with their Papal compliance...
Does no one remember what's called "self-reliance"?
If given a chance, can't we act on our own?
Help save ourselves or another lost soul?
The innocent, the forgotten, the helpless, and weak...
"Just a blessing and prayer,
and we trust God will care."
So much to be said for the timid and meek.

i fall in November leaves,
and i question what i believe.
In this prison i've made
from the beauty and hate,
What counts is what's real
is the heart that does bleed.

Perhaps the good deeds won't land me in Heaven,
but at least i feel like i'm earning Redemption.
i take the abuse, i cry and i brood-
i'd hope and i'd pray for my amazing grace-
"God loves me...right?"
a weary excuse.
Some people lose and never hear the truth:
You have control over your own destiny.
Run through the maze until your chest heaves
and when it gets to be
too much why not live, and let's leave?
i have been blessed to live this long, living mess.
If i must live in unrest, then i think it best
to cash in my chips; find my own forgivness.
You and me, God, might not see eye to eye.
But i'm no longer blind; i'll do what i think is right.
In the end when i die, and i'm on the other side,
we'll find out together if there was worth in my Life.

i fall in November leaves,
and i question what i believe.
In this prison i've made
from the beauty and hate,
What counts is what's real
is the heart that does bleed.< !signature-->

I was thinking of the immortal words of Socrates who said, "I drank what?"



[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 12-06-2000).]

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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-12-06 10:13 PM


Ethan,

So nice to see you back my friend.  This was a wonderful piece full of some very tough questions we all seem to ask ourselves from time to time.  Thought provoking writing.  Well done.  

Lone Wolf


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2000-12-06 10:20 PM


Going through a lot of spiritual tornados here Ethan.....hope you get it all figured out...I know that the Bible says that man was created in God's image...well that would make man a free moral agent wouldn't it..someone who can make decisions on his/her own ... can't blame God if man abuses the privileges given to him...as far as the sick and the hungry go ...they are a result of this state of imperfection we live in...Marge Tindal made a marvelous reply to me answering a poem I wrote about her...about a time when all of mankind will live in peace and happiness.. I know this sounds like a cinderella story but it's really all we have...because man can't really control his own destiny completely there's always been setbacks...but man can choose to try, over and over again...yet the results are always incomplete..the spin offs of our high tech world today are really scary when it comes to looking at nature that supports this planet...I also know that it says in the Bible that "God will bring to ruin those who are runing the earth." But then others say the Bible is a fantasy book that was written by men...I'm not so sure it wasn't inspired!!!

Sorry to go on so I just got on a roll there and believe it or not I'm not a religious man. I just think that way.....ethome

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-12-06 10:55 PM


Well so nice to see you back with us and count on the fact that you were missed.  This is a very provoking piece for the mind to roll through and I am sure I will be pondering it and reading it again.  You have much to figure out in this one but so do we and as if we didn't have enough already, you left us with no choice but to add this one to our plates.  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-12-07 12:03 PM


Ethan...you moved me to tears...I have to come back to this one to give it a proper reply...like it deserves~
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2000-12-07 12:41 PM


Cry out from abuse,
but you can't see the marks.
Through all these trials, i feel God has abandoned me
and sometimes i can't believe
why all this is happening...

i fall in November leaves,
and i question what i believe.
In this prison i've made
from the beauty and hate,
What counts is what's real
is the heart that does bleed.

Open my mind and the window and blinds,
as the moon shines her light on the truth that i find.
Lies untold and low and behold,
the night's honest winds do blow so cold.
===================
Help save ourselves or another lost soul?
The innocent, the forgotten, the helpless, and weak...
"Just a blessing and prayer,
and we trust God will care."
So much to be said for the timid and meek.
====================
Some people lose and never hear the truth:
You have control over your own destiny.
===================
If i must live in unrest, then i think it best
to cash in my chips; find my own forgivness.
You and me, God, might not see eye to eye.
But i'm no longer blind; i'll do what i think is right.
In the end when i die, and i'm on the other side,
we'll find out together if there was worth in my Life.
==============
Ethan baby ...you know you break my heart when you write like this...and yes you have been missed...
but thats the beauty of this place...you can take the space you need and come back and we're still here saving ya a spot ...
I have missed your gift of reflections kissed in rhyme and wisdom far beyond your years ...
and never doubt your life has worth baby...
for one..this gift you have...
you are a poetic prophet...and  your words move and effect us...
and we learn from you.
I am so happy to see your name here...
for how ever long you can stay ...
love ya E-gator  
me


< !signature-->

I looked into the sky for my anthem
The words and music came through
But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen
Looking into you


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 12-07-2000).]

Startime
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since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
6 posted 2000-12-07 12:58 PM


Very thought compelling poem here. It seems through all of your heartache you have many questions and are looking for answers. All of us must follow our own paths, dear one. The fact that you are asking such questions means you are on a path to find them. May love lead you in your search for truth and understanding. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-12-07 01:08 AM


Hello Ethan...I've missed you...this is a very thought provoking write to leave us with...God gave us a brain...gave us freewill...what we do with that gift is up to each individual...believe not believe...we sure could have a wonderful discussion about this huh? Welcome back
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

8 posted 2000-12-07 06:31 AM


I too, have missed you.  And a wow-ee from me on this provocative piece. Quite a little ditty you type out, *smile*

I loved the wandering searching in this. But still, we've got to try, yes? Not much point if we don't. Hugs to you, m'friend.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

9 posted 2000-12-07 08:43 AM


~No Religion~
Van Morrison
from the cd: Days Like This

We didn't know no better, and they said it could be worse
Some people thought it was blessing
Other people think that it's a curse
It's a choice between fact and fiction
And the whole world has gone astray
That's why there's no religion, no religion, no religion here today

***And there's no straight answers
Of what this thing called love is all about
Some say it's unconditional
Other people just remain in doubt
Well I cleaned up my diction, I had nothing left to say****
Except there's no religion, no religion, no religion here today

***And they ask what hate is
It's just the other side of love
Some people want to give their enemies
Everything they think that they deserve
Some say why don't you love your neighbours
Go ahead, turn the other cheek
But there's nobody on this planet that can ever be so meek
And I can't bleed for you
You have to do it your own way****
And there's no religion, no religion, no religion here today

And they ask what hate is
It's just the other side of love
Some people want to give their enemies
Everything they think that they deserve
Some say why don't you love your neighbours
Go ahead, turn the other cheek
But have you ever met anybody who's ever been the meek
And it's so cruel to expect the saviour to save the day
And there's no religion, no religion, no religion here today

And there's no mystery, and there's nothing hidden
And there's no religion here today

And there's no religion, no religion, no religion here today



I looked into the sky for my anthem
The words and music came through
But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen
Looking into you

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
10 posted 2000-12-07 08:53 AM


Sad. Powerful!  When we find ourselves in this frame...we can only pray.  That seems to be alluded to in your piece, even though it's a piece filled with an element of despair.  Yes,
like ethome, I hope you get it figured out.  That's all we can hope for ourselves and others.

Charisma
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lost in blue pages
11 posted 2000-12-07 09:07 AM


Welcome back, allready missed you, but hey you made that up with this wonderful penned poem, straith from your heart.

powerful spoken, and there's somethings to pondering.

((hugs))
Charisma

rosepetals25
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12 posted 2000-12-07 11:39 AM


Ethan,

   What a powerfully soul searching poem.  I do believe I am in the same boat you are.. at least the same boat as this poem.  You have asked the same questions I find myself asking, and I'm sure alot of other people do.  It's a wonderful write, it makes you stop and think, just what excellent poetry is suppose to do. Thanks for sharing this.. it was quite enjoyed and pondered.



~~Tara aka rp25 :o)

vandana
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13 posted 2000-12-07 07:00 PM


Nicely done
Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
14 posted 2000-12-11 01:37 PM


Lone_wolf: a familiar face! how are you doin? thanks so much for droppin in to read. sorry my icq is never on...i'm lazy  

ethome: thanks for the reply and the new thoughts...much remains unsaid.

mark: what's up dude. i always appreciate kind words from a talent such as yourself. thanks for froppin in.

butterflies don't cry: i'm not sure how to react, but i await your reply then. *hugs* i didn't mean to do that.  

JM: my reflection. it makes me happy and sad that you understand   but on a lighter note... how HAVE you been dahling? i have missed a few of your new ones, but i've been digging a little.   thanks for the read and the song.

startime: thanks for readin it, and thanks for the advice. perhaps i am on the path already... OH, and nice to meet you. you are a new face around here to me. i'll have to read some of yours.  

paula: thanks for readin! it's nice to know that people remember ya 'round here!   usually this starts more arguments than discussions...  

serenity: hello m'friend! thanks for droppin in! i am most honored to receive a wowee from you.  

VAS: thanks for the read. it was either St. Peter or MC Hammer who said, "We got to pray just to make it today. I say we pray."

charisma: i look at your posts and i see you've been a busy bee!! i will have to go looking for some post of yours...   thanks for the read and the warm welcome.

rosepetals25: i'm sorry that you too must ask these questions, but then i suppose, when the journey is over, we'll just be stronger. it's just hard to see the end of the tunnel from here, you know? good luck. thanks for readin'.

vandana: short an sweet. thanks.< !signature-->

"The bar is always open,
the time is always right.
If God's love and word go unspoken,
then the music plays all night."

[This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 12-11-2000).]

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
15 posted 2000-12-11 02:10 PM


We definitely do not know the secrets of life, but God does know, and there is a reason sometimes we go through things we do. We all question at times it's a human characteristic, There is God that does have all the answers, so keep praying, God answers prayers.
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