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The Shore (linked cinquains)
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The Shore (linked cinquains) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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The shore Slapped by the surf As we watch holding hands Burning sun falls into the sea We kiss We kiss Lovers and friends A sweet taste of longing You burn into my very soul You please You please Me with your smile You give yourself so free You touch my innermost being I'm yours I'm yours Warm wetness tells We're well past going back You fall back into my body We join We join Melding, molding Skin fusing, skin burning Two bodies and the ocean beat The shore There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Mar |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
this this is this is very very good this is Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is beautiful Bill...I have never tried this but it looks like fun and you make it lovely...maybe I will have a go at it...thanks |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Never saw this before. VERY good. Is it always 2 4 6 8 2? I think I'd like to try this format. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
moonlight wine and roses remind me of your love the way they shine..they taste and smell of you A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sunshine- ~S~ Thanks (stutter much? ~G~) Paula - Interloper - Yes the rule is simple - 5 lines: 1st 2 syllables, 2nd 4, 3rd 6, 4th 8, and return to 2 for the 5th Thank you - it is (can be) a fun form with much power and beauty Victoria - You must know how very much I appreciate a poetic response - your Cinquain is most beautiful! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WY~ Whew......steamy......very sexy dear man.....  Love this format, how do you do these?  -SEAOh I see there above me, thanks  [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 12-05-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
let's see. . . 2-4-6-8-2. . . ok. . . Sorry Bill, you don't mind if I take notes do you? Wonderful sir. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sven- What could be simpler - now just make the words fit - thanks ole friend |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
SEA - So sorry - did not mean to ignore you - "sexy"? - you should have seen the 1st draft Thank you |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill...A beautiful form and poem! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie - Cinquains can be fun - and with a great person to dwell on - it is easy to be inspired |
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