Open Poetry #11 |
Take me for a Ride |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Take me For a Ride Take me in your car with all that chrome and blow my hair across my face like I was eighteen and new in your yellow shine your tuck and roll intoxicates me and the sound of your breathing engine ignites my oh take me for a ride in leather in your open door to the sky to the star studded flame you paint rum de rum strum wheels circle me with this highway dance and I will read your map yes and take you places places where turbo charge is a feeling yes and the night is metallic and I see myself in the reflection of your oh so sweet and clean delivery Take me in your car with all that chrome and blow my hair across my face like I was eighteen and new |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
the sound of your breathing engine ignites my oooohweee Marie this poem is cool lady enjoyed the read thanks Mae "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie Well, you little hitch-hiker,you ! Love it when you play ! Varooooooooooom ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
......LOL.....loved it Martie, just what i needed this horrid wet dull english morning.... a bit of shiny chrome and a clean delivery .... heh ... P |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Visions of the shiny convertibles I had - the summers - top down flying down the highway to the beach - no cares just the throaty roar of the duals and windblown hair and smiles - thanks for taking me back~S~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Revvvvv up the engine, turn up the stereo, put the top down....and drive .....sounds heavenly!!!! Love the way you weave Martie!! The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--I'm glad you enjoyed...thanks for stopping by. Marge--something about the sound of a good motor gets to me...thanks. Philip--Glad this gave you a lift. Bill--I went to a car show on Sunday...so many of those old cars looking new again...thanks. Butterflies--The road is great, but I'd rather fly like a butterfly. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie this is such a clever poetic charming piece you have written here.....wonderful thoughts recalled to vivid imagination!! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--Nothing like the radio on to some old song and the highway...Thanks. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
On "That Long and Winding Road" my friend and definitely with my engine purring and revving to "YOUR" song on this one. Now how about a ride in a pick-up truck instead? After all, you do know what follows behind the cab don't you? Makes for a wonderful glance of the starry sky at night in those mountains of southern California ya know. Loved every twist and turn in this one. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Martie, I like this one. To feel the freedom and newness of it all. Awesome. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
and blow my hair across my face like I was eighteen and new ....I was going to comment on those two lines....but somehow what I was going to say....slips my mind just now. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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