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Living on the Edge of Tears
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Living on the Edge of Tears |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
One foot on the brink of emptiness We stand poised, holding onto our fears Gazing around in sad confusion Always living on the edge of tears A slight turn of the head here and there Shows us nothing on horizon’s view Resisting life’s fulfillment and joy Holding tight to the past’s residue The world may still move on around us But we stand here with our guarded heart Hoping for some small semblance of The contented past that fell apart Step forward and we may find nothing Move forward and the unknown appears So here we are, our hearts rejected Ever living on the edge of tears. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
After a serious hurt that often happens ...you end up with a gaurded heart and trust gets a boot out the door and suspiciousness comes right on in...the poem here is excellent it's so full of truth but done so well that the reader isn't going to forget the content and the purpose. really enjoyed it for sure......ethome..... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful expression Sharon ... you've captured deep feelings so well in this poem. Indeed we become guarded and hesitant clinging to the past, fearful of what may or may not be in the future, beautifully written.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It's a neighborhood I know well...thought-provoking write....I enjoyed it Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I really like this, my friend. And love you title, too. jwesley |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
PD- emotionally powerful poem you have penned here. the fear of the unknown can be VERY scary, but sometimes you just gotta take a risk. enjoyed this very much! take care. ~amy~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The world may still move on around us But we stand here with our guarded heart Hoping for some small semblance of The contented past that fell apart Step forward and we may find nothing Move forward and the unknown appears So here we are, our hearts rejected Ever living on the edge of tears. ================ Sharon this is a very emotional piece... its appeal and beauty is in its melancoly, and its haunted heart emote. perfect rhyme and cadence ... and the repetition of the title line adds to its poetic grace.(very cool title btw) very well written ...and related too wel. jm |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
That's when we just have to take that last step over the edge. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, You have a little gem here, I'd put it away in the vault. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
all I can say is, I'm glad I chose this one to read and like Seymour I shall store it in my mind and library, no one could have written this better...my feelings of yesterday, today and....hopefully not of the morrow huggzz, Sharon ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The past is just that - past - and we rarely can return to it - as you say - Life goes on... For each door closed to us, however, another opens... That's what I hear, anyway.. Nice work here, PdV..  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The edge is a place that holds so many possibilities PD. Sometimes it is so hard to keep a balance from teetering over the edge. Beautiful, and so well done. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is fantastic!!! I love this one...it's a keeper for me...you are burning the keys these days. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Step forward and we may find nothing Move forward and the unknown appears So here we are, our hearts rejected Ever living on the edge of tears." Sharon, I can really relate to this piece. You describe the feelings so well, and so beautifully. Another gem from you, my friend. This one goes in my library! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 Living on the edge of tears...Wow, what a predicament to be in. Hey, we can't go back in life... there is only going forward, but we can go forward standing still or we can go forward falling. What about falling forward? Thats it! If you gotta fall... Fall Forward. Just an idea. Luv, Bob <>< |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Poetdevine, I know that feeling very well, you have magnificent skills, well done. "Hoping for some small semblance of The contented past that fell apart" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ya know, this brought tears! Damn Sharon, this grabs the heart!! Hugz <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
So true, PdV. Well expressed thoughts. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done! I have been there, and am visiting once again, to that edge. I guess it's kinda like standing in the check-out line and seeing something that hits just right, enough to push you over the edge...and you bust out crying...you felt it welling up, but prayed that you could wait till you get into the car, tried to think of something else to stall it...yes, I'm there. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for you kind words. The title has lived in my heart for 10 years. Last night, the poem wrote itself around the title. Thank YOU all for inspiring me for the last 18 months. I will never forget all that you've given me.  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful poem PDV--a place we all visit from time to time Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
So many accolades, and each one richly desrved. Fabulous! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Lloyd Junior Member
since 1999-06-16
Posts 17Torquay, Vic. Australia |
I just have to add my voice to the crowd - a great piece ! |
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Loneheart Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 92Eastern US |
I am left speechless after this read your work is just as beautiful as always my friend Loneheart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a great line! Wish I had thought of it! Wow... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've expressed it well, Sharon. Well done! Denise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What WhtDove said! *S* (nodding vigorously) This is a beautiful description of yearning and uncertainty (two emotions I know well! LOL) |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Oh my...This was incredibly, beautifully written! Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
A powerful poem P.D. I think its the thrill of the risk of it not working out that makes it so worthwhile when it does, the joys return 10 fold. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a moving piece about what I can most relate to. Wanting to move, but afraid. It is so expressive. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
counting this response - you've quickly accumulated 29 - testimony to the fact that you've penned a real gem - it goes in my treasure box! |
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