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Desire Become Life
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Desire Become Life |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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Desire Becomes Life Karen Torbiak 2000 A gasp becomes a shout look skyward I would share brilliance streaks the darkness A gasp becomes a stare A stare becomes a dream making my heart to spin wrapped in fantasy A stare becomes a grin A grin becomes a smile your eyes light my skies with sparkles of delight A grin becomes a sigh A sigh becomes a moan your touch sets the fire kissed from lover's lips A sigh becomes desire Desire becomes love free from all hurt and strife passions flow deep within Desire becomes life Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Karen, Beautifully romantic poetry that always flows from your pen. This is no exception. Well done my friend. He is lucky indeed.  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Thank you so much Lone Wolf. *sigh* but as life has it, there is no he. I write from pure fantasy. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, then, your fantasy is alive and well! This is great....a circle of life type of message, one thing creating another. I love it... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful Startime. . . your words move wonderfully. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love the style of this one Karen!! I love how you structured the poem to make such emphasis on the philosopical angle which you turned into love and life...really good!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Keep writing like this and there will be!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Karen... beautiful! i really loved how you constructed the flow of this, allowing each verse to be based on the one previous to it. very clever and actually a very beautiful poem indeed. *sighs* "Desire becomes love free from all hurt and strife passions flow deep within Desire becomes life" simply beautiful... take care. ~amy~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I am sure that your dream will soon become reality if you shine half as much as the love and desire you put into this wonderful piece. Lovely write and beautifully illustrated in your heart's mind. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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