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My Vain Intruder
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My Vain Intruder |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
My Vain Intruder Whose breath so precious can speak of dying. When drowning overwhelmed me, I rose -- a slumbering captain -- to sail the strand's length. Soon I found the light nestled shore, my feet etching evident life in white sand. Like a kite minus wind, dropping as a wounded fowl -- words of failing crash in tired flight. My spirit vilely chased by darkness has risen from the cold of a stone road -- its pebbles a marker of a battle once raging. Death -- my vain intruder -- you've pried many nights at my door, yet still I live. The swell of lost youth catches my breath, as I know this day has been salted away for the arrival of her beauty. Days past, my language unprepared to greet her -- my soul untamed. Now, I marvel at her presence -- each day's prayers beginning with the light of her candle, and resting with the kiss of her eyes in my soul. © Robert Joseph ~enb~ [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Days past, my language unprepared to greet her -- my soul untamed. such a beautiful poem..i truly loved this Robert..makes me wonder what language is spoken in heaven..i read this three times..loved it..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this piece is fantastic, Robert!!! I love this the most: Like a kite minus wind, dropping as a wounded fowl -- words of failing crash in tired flight. And any piece that makes me think of a lighthouse and its light from the shore gets my vote, as well. Loved this poem! May I copy and place in my favorites of others? |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, and VAS...Thank you for the generous responses. I appreciate them both. Robert Joseph Ps VAS, yes please be my guest, and copy this piece if you like. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Out of the darkness and into the light. Marvelous. Corinne |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"beginning with the light of her candle, and resting with the kiss of her eyes in my soul" If that's not a poet's work then I shall have to quit, because I don't understand...very dark and beautiful this work...beauty on the dark side is there to be absorbed..very good! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Robert: I agree with Ethome's comments - a poet you are indeed and those words - ah so beautifully penned! Roniece |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I loved the last line...this is superb!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh - what can I say Robert? Another one wonderfully done... 'Days past, my language unprepared to greet her -- my soul untamed. Now, I marvel at her presence -- each day's prayers beginning with the light of her candle, and resting with the kiss of her eyes in my soul.' Remember how we were talking about publishing...?????? K |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Corrine, ethome, Roniece, Poet deVine, and Kamla... Thanks so much, each response is greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
ahhhhhhh a romantic a poet after my own heart..loved the feel in this..very nice |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
beautiful -Tier {R.T.} |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
artsygrl, and R.T. thanks for taking the time to read and reply. Glad you enjoyed it. Robert Joseph |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is inspiring. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Thank you, Kathleen. I appreciate your thoughtful response. Robert Joseph |
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