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simpleman46
New Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 7
Michigan

0 posted 2000-12-04 02:23 PM

You drape your naked arm carelessly across my body,
I can see goose bumps rise in the cool morning air,
Your toe
Peeks,
Out from the end of the bed,
The polished red nail appears as blood upon the sheets,
Ruining
Perfecting,
Our all-white canvas,

You stir,
And your arm rests on my neck,
A strangle hold if you were to move an inch,
And squeeze,

I close my eyes,
Breathe,
And try to imagine a better place to die,
But I can’t,
So I remain here,
Breathing in your quiet scent,
Watching your breast move in the slow pace of slumber,
I trust you,
And so I sleep.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-12-04 02:35 PM

This is perfect! I just ate this up! I love the way you put this together. Fantastic job!

-SEA

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

2 posted 2000-12-04 02:36 PM

Ahh, this piece is very beautiful and it flowed very well....brilliant piece!

Nathan

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2000-12-04 02:37 PM

And so would I...James

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

4 posted 2000-12-04 04:15 PM

There is no greater honor you could of bestowed upon your lady. TRUST

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2000-12-04 04:40 PM

a lovely place to die ha..enjoyed reading..nicely written..

~Victoria~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2000-12-04 04:50 PM

Touching, tender, intimate and warm comfortable writing....I went there I hope you did'nt feel too crowded...welcome to Passions! ....ethome......

nicolette
Junior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 42
St. Paul, Minnesota

7 posted 2000-12-04 04:55 PM

I agree...couldn't imagine a better place to die. This poem was wonderfully vivid.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

8 posted 2000-12-04 05:03 PM

WOW... just...perfect!

-Tier

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

9 posted 2000-12-04 05:07 PM

I close my eyes,
Breathe,
And try to imagine a better place to die,
===========================================
1derful!

BRAVO.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

10 posted 2000-12-04 05:13 PM

I agree with everyone this was a very beautiful flowing poem..and I could imagine it all...thank you

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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