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The Gift of Love
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The Gift of Love |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Upon love’s floor I’ve been spun Beneath it’s touch I’ve come undone By it’s pen I’ve been sketched Upon it’s crystal I’ve been etched In love’s sea I’ve cast my fears Within it’s rays I’ve dried my tears By it’s daystar I’ve been led Upon it’s down I’ve laid my head Under love’s wing I’ve been secure To it’s magic I’ve held dear By it’s hands I’ve been created Abreast it’s lullaby I’ve been sedated By virtue of love’s grace I will live Reaching to it’s soul I will give Upon it’s wing I will fly With it’s breath I will sigh Affixed to love’s feet I will walk With it’s tongue I will talk Supported by it’s rules I will abide Through it’s valleys I will glide Throughout it’s song I will dance Within it’s vision I will glance Clinging to my hands it will not stay For it's not mine....till I give it away |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Butterfly, this is sooooo beautiful... My goodness, I have no words to say... Your poetry just seems to makes me smile so bright as I read the love you express in these treasured words of rhyme...  coco |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Beautiful writing my dear friend. Love truly is not love until we give it away. Then it is a priceless treasure to be shared with those who mean the most to us. May you give and receive in abundance. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Ooh, this is wonderful! I think this is my favorite of yours! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"Under love’s wing I’ve been secure To it’s magic I’ve held dear" BDC, Beautiful poem...enjoyed the read. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think you have probably become one of the loveliest butterflies I have ever laid eyes on, and this poem shows it... and now I think I have run out of words...everything about it is...perfect to me... so it must go in my library... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Butterflies, you know that I'm a great appreciator of poetry well written and I must say that the couplets you used and the rhyming words you chose (sketched, etched, created, sedated) show great imagination and talent. Combine this with excellent words and a killer of a last line and this is a poem I'm very happy to APPLAUD!!!!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Upon love’s floor I’ve been spun Beneath it’s touch I’ve come undone By it’s pen I’ve been sketched Upon it’s crystal I’ve been etched ==================== Under love’s wing I’ve been secure To it’s magic I’ve held dear By it’s hands I’ve been created Abreast it’s lullaby I’ve been sedated By virtue of love’s grace I will live Reaching to it’s soul I will give Upon it’s wing I will fly With it’s breath I will sigh ================== Throughout it’s song I will dance Within it’s vision I will glance Clinging to my hands it will not stay For it's not mine....till I give it away =================== big ole *sigh* my oh my ... talk about a rewrite penned in heaven my goodness me girlie...this is enchanting .. poetic perfection...poetry in motion and you look quite lovely undone my dear BEAUTIFUL poem me SS... and ditto all that WISE DEER said.. ya know I dig your couplets LOL  (yayaya)this one goes in my library under butterfly kisses. I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey Holly butterfly, that pen of yours is writing with some sweet ink these days...this read to me like an extended affirmation...and I too, need to read this over and over again until it sinks into my thick skull! love and hugs for you, for this. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
So magical, love is that way, and when you decide to love it should be given as a gift, beautiful poem. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
holly~ truly beautiful!! you have penned a breataking piece! the gift of love should be both given and recieved. your heart is shining through these days my friend and it is a splendid view. take care. ~amy~ |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
BDC, Since everyone else said it so wonderfully, I'll simply have to say .."Yeah what they said" hehe. It's a beautiful poem I'm glad I stopped in this morning to read it.~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ Just stunning in the softest kinda way. The rhyme scheme is right on ! And this fact is so true - 'For it's not mine....till I give it away' How very lovely is this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You take my breath away.... CoCo* YOU always bring smiles to me...and for that I thank you~ LW* My dear friend...when I write anything that you enjoy it is I that am thankful~ Tara* What a beautiful soul you are...thank you~ Poeminister* I'm thankful to write so that you may enjoy~ Karilea* You know I find it hard to accept your praise....but I do so graciously and with all the appreciation in my soul~ 'Deer* To have you applaud....I Blush my friend...heart felt thanks to you~ JM* My couplets adore you...LOL  Thank you for your eyes on this one...and for being so darn bossy Love ya!S'en* Sweet ink?...yes they sell it by the buckets here Thank you my friend for your praise, hug and love...returned to you ten fold~RB* Thank you so much for your blooming reply~ Amy-girl* It is I that thanks you my friend...for always sharing your sunshine with me~ Tara* No matter what you say...I'm glad you stopped in to say it...thank you so much~ Marge* My thanks to the queen of romance and "soft"...It's an honor to have you reply and read my friend~ |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Beautiful. And I love the butterfly graphic. Superb poem. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well if Marge is the queen of romance then you are the princess of wings ready to take flight at a moments notice and you have shown that you are more than capable of penning poetic perfection. AND NO!!!!!! ... this is NOT a biased opinion. This is simply the your best and you know that I have read them all and yes it is even replacing my favorite of yours to go at the top. A rewrite that took time but every minute we had to wait for it was more than worth the investment you made into it. I say that you need to submit this one to the main site. NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How is that for bossy?  A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Hello, my Butterfly, You always had a special way with words and it hasn't changed! How beautiful and you have given a lot of LOVE away and are still giving. Love you and many hugs. ME |
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lisad Junior Member
since 2000-12-05
Posts 22 |
This is truly a work of art. The words moved me to tears. It is a great pleasure to be able to read your work. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
For it's not mine....till I give it away ============================ Kinda the bottom line, eh what? How wonderful this is! Thank you ... Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Butterflies~ Absolutely breath-takingly beautiful! -SEA |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Butterflies.....Absolutely Beautiful... I think I liked the last line best..Makes such perfect sense..... LL |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Butterflies....what a beautiful summation of all the ways that love has affected your heart and soul. My goodness I found this so touching and down to earth with real well founded emotion....a well adjusted human being expressing the tenderness of the romance of love... Man I got to give you a great big kiss for this one I really enjoyed it so much!!! take care and have a wonderful night....ethome..... real nice!...real class! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
dragonpoe* Thank you so much for reading~ Mark* My sweet BIASED Bossy friend...lol thank you from the bottom of my heart and I will consider it...because you know my head is much harder than yours ~Mom* Well I know I could Talk for hours and not say a thing...I'm glad I'm finally getting the hang of it Love you!Lisa* It's an honor to have you reading, welcome to Passions, I'm glad you enjoyed this~ Interloper* Thank You...and yes it is the bottom line in love isn't it~ Sea* Many thanks to you for reading~ LL* Thank you and welcome to Passions, I like to weave the last line of my poems like a bow to wrap the piece up...I'm glad you enjoyed it~ Ethome* Big Blushes!! Plant one on me...LOL You are always so kind with your beautiful replies, thank you from the bottom of my heart~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Holly- well...i thought i had replied to this one already, but apparently i was mistaken..lol. this is absolutely beautiful...as usual.. i think it may be my favorite of yours... it definitely falls in the top 2 or 3.. love it.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Vicky* You are always so generous with your compliments...thank you so much I hope I can continue to write what you enjoy~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
It just doesn't get any better than this! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Ramses Junior Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 40Porsgrunn, Telemark, Norway |
Butterlies_dont_cry This one sums up my romantic heart and mind in one single poem. The forces of love leading, tempting, promising.... This is just beautiful.. ---<-@ (A rose to you) -Ramses- |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh butterfly.....this one is sooooo romantic....to soar on wings of love is always heavenly. wonderful penned my friend ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such perfection. I loved every word of this. Much love to you from me. http://www.geocities.com/karenltorbiak/index.html |
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