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Balladeer
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0 posted 2000-12-03 07:47 PM



I'm blessed that you are there for me
Your love is light that gets me through
Because I know you care for me.

For all of life you share for me
In everything you say and do
I'm blessed that you are there for me.

These feelings are quite rare for me
You open doors I never knew
Because I know you care for me.

Life's never been too fair for me
Heartache and pain were nothing new...
I'm blessed that you are there for me.

No other thoughts compare for me
Than feeling that your love is true
Because I know you care for me.

There will be no despair for me
All problems disappear from view.
I'm blessed that you are there for me
Because I know you care for me.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-12-03 07:51 PM


Good villanelle with a lovely theme...though I don't think I'd like to try one myself!
Poeminister
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2 posted 2000-12-03 07:56 PM


Balladeer,
Lovely villanelle, and sentiment...I know that villanelles are tough to write sometimes, but they're always such a pleasure to read, and you've done this excellently, with great flow and rhyme.  Nicely done...

take care,
Poeminister< !signature-->

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O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe




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Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-12-03 08:00 PM


This expresses the kinds of feelings that come around once in a lifetime.  Blessings should always come from an open door, with no lock.
It's a very special poem, and the style is wonderful. Thank you for this one, Michael.



What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman



doreen peri
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4 posted 2000-12-03 08:03 PM


i agree with ms rose about the once in a lifetime thing and the no lock thing and the open door...

great poem, michael

funny about the importance of images... y'know?

((((hug))))

Startime
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5 posted 2000-12-03 08:05 PM


*sigh* Dear one, although I know not what a villanelle is this poem sang with wonderful feelings of soft caring. *sigh* It is beautiful, dear one, and I love it. I too feel such feelings of being blessed by one I treasure these past couple of days. Much love to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com


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6 posted 2000-12-03 09:06 PM


Have often wondered why a villanelle, which sounds like a nasty little bugger, is usually so very beautiful in design...

and you are very fortunate to be in your lady love's light, Deer...especially if she keeps you writing like this...

good pic, too...


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Janet Marie
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7 posted 2000-12-03 10:27 PM


ahhh I just love it when a poet plays with poetry  
very cool theme here sweets...
I havent tried one of these with success yet
(shhh dont tell Nan)
you made it look easy ...
later-go to the head of the class-gator
jm

I looked into the sky for my anthem
The words and music came through
But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen
Looking into you

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8 posted 2000-12-03 10:38 PM


Is there a secret to this???? why oh why won't my brain do this? Send help, Michael!!!

It's just beautiful...and I intend to study, AGAIN...grin. You DO make it look so easy!

Kevin
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9 posted 2000-12-04 05:31 AM


Hey old friend,

havent seen you in a while, even in my short visits back to passions.

Good to see you havent lost a step

this is one of my favorites from you
seems like it came from just a little bit deeper this time   enjoy your holiday season if I dont get to speak to you again

PaulF
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10 posted 2000-12-04 05:41 AM


This is beautiful Balladeer, I've never seen this form or heard of it before.  I like it alot.
Sunshine
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11 posted 2001-01-01 11:01 AM


Somehow it seems right to bring this back up for
New Year's Day...

Lana
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12 posted 2001-01-01 12:16 PM


GOD where has this been, how romantic and loving.....

“You’re everything I never knew I wanted.
Matthew Perry “Fools Rush In”
Lana

Denise
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13 posted 2001-01-01 12:35 PM


This is sooooooo lovely!! How did I ever miss this one?! I'm glad I found it now!

Denise

Kethry
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14 posted 2001-01-01 01:50 PM


'Deer,
what a way to start the year, beautiful.
Keth


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15 posted 2001-01-01 04:27 PM


Whoa what have I missed, Balladeers' heart is flowing with so much love and passion, I like reading this Romantic Romeo side!!!!very lovely and romantic!!!
Charisma
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16 posted 2001-01-01 05:32 PM


oh my.....think that I can dwell in this one....*sigh*...sooooooooooo romantic.....
excellent my friend as always.....

((hugs))
Charisma

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