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The Essence of a Rose |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite, repost. The Essence of a Rose She glories on a tender stem This rose that I review Surrounding thorns as diadem A majesty of blue. Her osculate is not a whim Nor I a foolish foil She's knighted me the sweet of them That brought my blood to boil. I cannot hide this heart of care These minions of reveal I melt within this love I bare Nor can I bare conceal. Somehow I can not prune this rose Her majesty extreme I fear that she might decompose And turn into a dream. The mull, to pluck, to prune, to pluck Or should I just stay, thunderstruck. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The essence of a rose is a rose is a rose.... *Sy*.. 'Tis sweet indeed..  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah yes Sy, the temperate musings of fall...and if you should pluck, I shall gather the vase... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, So true, so true, so true. *L* Sy Sunshine, The vase, with water or with out water? *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Does not a rare red rose when picked ... still smell as sweet and if she's not spared ... will not winters cold deplete passage of time alone ... will cause her to wither on thy vine her fragility ....her lure ... her essence so divine her gifts momentary ... your heart she needs to capture for she will live on in your memory ... her grace of sweet enrapture as time steals her away ... give her one last long parting look then preserve her in your soul ... as you press her in the pages of a poetry book ****** *winkiewinkie* I can think of worse ways to end up... when I go... I wanna be pressed in the pages of a Shakes sonnet... how about you?  Your rose garden is lovely Sy-gator jm |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, The poem is beautiful, is it yours? Thank you sweet for the beautiful comment. *L* Sy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well now Sy, that will depend...do we want to dry the rose, or breath one last fragrant waft of scent...that will determine with or without water... and it's still a most lovely poem... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well my sweet Sy...actually i guess you could say its yours now....as I wrote it for you as a poetic reply to your way cool poem... and i forgot to mention in my above reply.. your vocabulary choices in this just blow me away... later-poetic-rose-with-no-thorn-gator jm |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful command of language in this Seymour ... and such a perfect cadence, a pleasure to read aloud. Very well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, I am thunderstuck by the beauty of this poem, and Janet Marie, with your superb response. I sit in awe of both of you Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Beauty of the rose comes to rest upon the pages of your poetry. Simply said - it blooms ! JanetMarie, a perfect poetic response. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I think dry with a breath of fragrance. *L* JM, I can't tell you how impressed I was with your poem. Excellent. *L* Sy Kit, And yours a wonderful comment. Elizabeth, To awe your poetic prowess is something. Love Sy Marge, And you are no slouch, "Simply said it blooms." *L* Sy |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Somehow I can not prune this rose Her majesty extreme I fear that she might decompose And turn into a dream. wow execllent piece, wonderfully written. A rose is a rose is a rose. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My applause to you and JM both for exquisite verses beyond compare. The language, the cadence, the content, and the flow are all amazingly beautiful. I am now bowing to you both. A duet might be in season as a treat to us all as I believe the two of you would re-define the term of modern day poetry. |
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water_stained_wisdom Junior Member
since 2008-03-07
Posts 28 |
  these remnants of a voice and smile, |
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