Open Poetry #10 |
She Sang |
Sunshine
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She Sang He stroked absolute the right emotion and thereafter dwelt in her such commotion that no longer the throbbing of the ocean could match her outpour of devotion and she sang O profound was the reverberation meet it, did she, with quickened celebration had you taken heed, heard the ring, cause for ovation as it stood in time with the ultimate creation when she sang neāermore then, shall passion dwell in quietness, when thereby the swell shall increase as if with harmonious bell and chime forth, their love to tell as she sang. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea, this is excellant, a beautiful poem. I really like this, it's an amazing read, and very well written. Take care Marsha |
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Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
What the h... just kidding!!! Unique perspectives starting from the beginning lady - interest and well thought out! Careful - someone might think you are a poet! |
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Sunshine
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Marsha, thank you...I always appreciate your coming in to read... Christopher, I'm surprised to see you here, but welcome, and I'm glad you enjoyed. P.S., I'll never be a poet, but I enjoy the attempt...thank you... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
ENJOYED IT!!!!!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
And she continues to sing. . . this poet of the land. . . Wonderful my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Never a poet she says!!!!! Yeah yeah yeah.....a poet and a romantic at the same time. So this is how the mermaids came to pass is it....them with their sirene's song lifted into the wind that causes even the best of men to fall prey to their taunting. HMMMMM...so how do you know so much of this song you sing? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Such lovely verse. It captures me in it's beauty and bathes me in it's song. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Karilea, I don't know how to even properly express how beautiful I think this is. It's left me stunned. So well done my friend, so very well done. Juls |
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Sunshine
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Well, WOW. And did anyone of you realize that I was going to junk this one? [Although I just really put them in a pile "over there" and wait for some real inspiration to rise...] So thank you, everyone...I truly thought this would have very little reply... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea, how many times must you be told girl stop slinking off to the back. This is a great poem, so sweeten those tonsils of yours and start belting out this song. Really love this one, admittedly not very ladylike to belt out anything, but who cares. Marsha |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sunshine- I love this. Very beautiful. I really enjoyed reading it. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--you sing...and I think you are a poet too! |
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Sunshine
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Ahem, Marsha, spraying non-existant tonsils now...ahem, la la la la... Vicky, thank you... Martie... ...thank you... |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Karilea that was awesome! A great read. It flowed well and made me think. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Elizabeth, for taking the time to read! AND think! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Sunshine my dear, Don't ever think what is said from your heart belongs in piles never to be seen, you are trully gifted friend and this piece is such beauty that would of been trully missed if it landed in some pile some were. Loved the poetry. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Sunshine
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Cerenity, my dear, thank you for not minding my "catching up" with folks who responded, but I was not able to catch before this sunk into the netherland of lost poetry...everyone should ALWAYS be replied too... and again, I am so glad you understand! And your comments fill my heart! Thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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