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trevorskogsbergh
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since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

0 posted 2000-10-09 05:10 AM

Walking through my home
Late I at night
My eye’s still groggy from sleep
Sounds of cars
Passing by my window
Like a drum with a steady beat

Into the kitchen
To wash my hands
And to dry them on my shirt
Back to bed
With dismal cravings
Of my pillow on which to flirt

I dream the dreams
Like many people
Of finding my one true love
On a sandy beach
A wayward town
Or in the stars above

I search her out
To all four corners
The earth is at my feet
I know she’s out there
Waiting for me
Our smiles are meant to meet

I will continue to dream
Like always before
Of our love that is meant to be
But until then
I must wait
Until she dreams of me

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-10-09 05:32 AM

Sigh: My initial reaction

a big one.

Very very moving poem you have here.

K

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

2 posted 2000-10-09 05:32 AM

This was great! A captivating weave of
dreams and hope. Fantastic writing~

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

3 posted 2000-10-09 05:42 AM

Why thank you for the kind critiques. I appreciate it.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

4 posted 2000-10-09 06:02 AM

to tell you that I love it, isn't true...
its more than that, but can not find the right words.
it also made me smile, because its so true.
great work, really enjoyed it

Charisma

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

5 posted 2000-10-10 08:22 PM

Thanks, but for some reason I'm still unhappy with it.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2000-10-13 01:12 PM

I hope your wait isn't a long one.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

7 posted 2000-10-13 01:16 PM

Trevor...speaking as a woman...there is nothing to be unhappy about with this one...makes me want to come to you in your dreams...

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

8 posted 2000-10-13 01:17 PM

A superb write my friend and a most delightful read for me today.

Coco

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

9 posted 2000-10-13 04:32 PM

Thanks everybody. You made my day and as always I appreciate your feedback.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

10 posted 2000-10-15 02:58 PM

moving it up.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

11 posted 2000-10-16 01:09 AM

don't believe I've welcomed you to the forum, I enjoyed this one, and welcome!

Kathleen

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

12 posted 2000-10-16 01:55 AM

Thanks for the welcome.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

13 posted 2000-10-16 03:50 AM

Not to neglect your poem, but first of all _great_ picture. This is so sweet... reminds me of the lines:

"I've faith that there's a soul somewhere
that's leading me around.
I wonder if she knows which way is down."

from Evaporated

I like the transition... your begining of groggy late night stumbling into the conquest of dreams and soul searching; very nice.
Oh, and Good luck on your quest

!

~ Beth

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 10-16-2000).]

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

14 posted 2000-10-16 04:12 AM

Thanks. My quest though is finally over.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

15 posted 2000-10-16 07:20 AM

Wonderful Trevor! You've painted a great visual for the reader here, and to cozy back up to dream ... is the perfect conclusion. Nicely penned!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

16 posted 2000-10-16 08:08 AM

Trevor, *sigh* beautiful, almost dreamy.
great poem.
Be well
Kethry

Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

17 posted 2000-10-17 04:07 AM

Thanks

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

trevorskogsbergh
Member

since 2000-02-03

Posts 129
South Pasadena, CA

18 posted 2000-10-17 04:16 PM

Moving it up.

Better to die, and sleep
The never-waking sleep, than linger on
And dare to live when the souls life is gone.

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