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A Taste Of Something Fine
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A Taste Of Something Fine |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~A Taste Of Something Fine~ This old 3 am ache rolls in ... and you're on my mind. In the thick, quiet, lonely of night ... I just cant seem to leave this behind. Your still here ... where you've always been. Inside my heart ... and under my skin. I feel you here beside me, I swear I can hear you breathe. Remembering your touch ... you were my sweet poetic reprieve. God how I miss it all, the comfort ... the anticipation. The contentment I knew in you ... the afterglow ... the inspiration. I don't know how to let this go, some where along the line ... you ... became part of me. Still, I've no regrets, I know some things simply just aren't meant to be. So I embrace this ache ... and I inhale and take you in. For me ... you will always define temptation ... be my most innocent sin. By your touch ... I found the lost woman in desperate need of discovery. Then finally tasted sheer pleasure ... while drowning in your depths and intensity. 3 am ache rolls in ... and once again your on my mind. Your memory brings a smile to my lips ... and I know ... in you ... I had a taste of something fine. Janet Marie (the "ache" series continues)  *********** Trying To Find Purpose Vertical Horizon from the CD: There and Back Again Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind ... something fine And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind The wind and your love to carry me Well tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But I know in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy Yea, in jealousy Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind ... something fine To carry me Please carry me [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-08-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey JM, what a wonderful read both poem are, I enjoyed. So I embrace this ache ... and I inhale and take you in. especially love these lines, it speaks to me  .Well done! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very very powerful JM. Deeply emotional and sad.....I enjoyed reading this greatly my friend! *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
"some where along the line ... you ... became part of me." What perfect words, and how wonderful when someone becomes part of you. Even when they're gone, you still have them, they're still there. Beautiful memories and post. ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet MArie, I have just gotten over my disappointment of finding that this is not a poem about Spam, even though I was sure by the title it was....;( You are an acher of pleasure, my dear |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Here I was saving this for a late-night treat .... and Balladeer stole my line !  Well, how about a *Hug* instead ! {{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{HUG}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}} ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
SS* This is as fine as they come...We would burn in the flame for eternity for that sweet pure taste of love if even for a moment...and the love that you found in that flame shows in everything you write...baby this one burns like the flame and floats like a butterfly...I love ya for this "series" as it speaks to my heart and sings to my soul! Later-3am-gator |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm UP--I'm UP--yawning... okay, I'm good to go not...I remember you, and this poem too...*winks* Baby you are too good at this...(she says it's the raspberry tea...hmmm...) Do they make raspberry COFFEE? (EW...NEVERMIND.) Love ya twin...e ya later. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
JanetMarie~ My dear friend, I love this!!! I know how bad the ache feels, but boy, can it be an inspiration. By the way, I love Vertical Horizon, too! (I love "Everything You Want", but right now, I am kinda partial to "You're a God".) Seems like we have a lot in common, dear! Love YA~ T ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet~ how many times can i say your wonderful lol...well i'll say it again...you go girl! awesome poem, filled with the depth of emotion and intensity i have come to expect from you. as always a joy to read and thank you for giving me something to think about today. love ya. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My friend, you already know that I do so love this one and all of the emotions in it. I have been trying so hard to reply poetically but I am lacking my muse. Wouldn't have anything to do with hanging around yours for so long now would it?  Has that rascally muse of yours been teaching mine how to hide? These 3 am things of yours are telling me that YOU NEED SLEEP........now start drinking juice or coffee or just plain ole water and put that darn tea down....well maybe not...it does have such an amazing affect on your muse and glows over into your words. HHHHmmmmm does this mean that I must start drinking raspberry tea again? |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
JM, such a beautiful sad story. I really enjoyed it. Take care, Dee |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ this made my heart hurt.......it's painful and beautiful all at once..... -SEA |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
JM.....beautiful....both of them enjoyed reading them Charisma |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a very sad, special poem. With that, let me say I love spam!!!! Once I can get the top off of it that is, with lots of mustard. Kathleen |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Your still here ... where you've always been. Inside my heart ... and under my skin. I feel you here beside me, "I swear I can hear you breathe. Remembering your touch ... you were my sweet poetic reprieve. God how I miss it all, the comfort ... the anticipation. The contentment I knew in you ... the afterglow ... the inspiration. I don't know how to let this go, some where along the line ... you ... became part of me." "So I embrace this ache ... and I inhale and take you in. For me ... you will always define temptation ... be my most innocent sin. By your touch ... I found the lost woman in desperate need of discovery." Oh boy Janet Marie ... the ache doesn't get any deeper than this! Excellent description, you expressed this temptation and tantalizing want/ache/desire/need perfectly! Well done JM! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-11-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Love your mind, and the rest of you too Gator gal. One of your secret admirer's. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--Sorry it took me so long to reply to this, I read it and was in a hurry, wanted to say something fine....because you are so fine...and your 3AM ache hurts..cause I can feel it in your words... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Well first of all girl.....I have been passing this for days thinking I had already replied to fine piece. I know..........DUH!!!!!!!!  So, I love this one!!! Now this is one I can relate too. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
From the moment I read: "I feel you here beside me, I swear I can hear you breathe." I identified - and you had me in te palm of your hand. Then I felt the ache - sweet and painful - and knew it too You write my heart gater - even when you write for you |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is quite beautiful Janet Marie, and you've held me captive with your lines of poetry. Sometimes remembering what once was creates that ache and you describe it so well. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janny~ An emotion packed piece, expressed deeply. 3 am ache rolls in ... and once again your on my mind. Your memory brings a smile to my lips ... and I know ... in you ... I had a taste of something fine. I love this ending...so sweet Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is sad, it's wonderful... and oh, so familiar. Great job, JM!! |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Janet Marie, there is much to parallel within my own heart and mind as I ponder your words, heartfelt and effective writing. Robert Joseph |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Girl girl girl...took me a while to get here...but damn...you know how this makes me feel...what you write you may as well have pulled straight from my own heart and mind. |
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Martinque Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 69 |
Your writing is something fine. |
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