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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Waking One night in deep of winter slumber Wrapped in blanket's warm encumber In my room in shades of umber Lying still in peaceful pose In a dream as I was sleeping Memories were slowly creeping In my sleep my heart was weeping Interrupting my repose From haunting dream and slowly waking Turning in a silent shaking Window panes from icy flaking Crackled as they piled with snows Through heavy storm the night was glowing Somehow meant to wake me knowing That the sight of lovely snowing Makes me weep as sorrow flows Twas on a night of winter weather Downy flakes as light as feather We lay here in warmth together Window sills piled up with snows All the love I well remember In the cold of mid December Lost for good the burning ember Now I bask in afterglows Why God makes a plan of sorrow Why do heavy winter snows blow Yet through pain the nightime sky glows It's a mystery no one knows Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 09-25-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Liz, this is utterly beautiful! The flow, the beautiful style you've formatted it in, and the words ... oh the words. So sweetly and tenderly spoken Liz. Your talent is so rich, just wonderful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Such a beautiful poem..love it.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Elizabeth, This is just so gorgeous, I enjoyed reading every line. Thanks for sharing this one. Bill |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Just the loveliest of verse. You capture the essence of poetess with your lovely penning. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Very tender and very nice. LOve Sy PS. A little on the Poe side, but I like Poe. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz - if this is not your very best - then I am still to read it - I assure you this one is a treasure for my 'most treasured' box |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Utterly exquisite. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Twas on a night of winter weather Downy flakes as light as feather We lay here in warmth together Window sills piled up with snows All the love I well remember In the cold of mid December Lost for good the burning ember Now I bask in afterglows Why God makes a plan of sorrow Why do heavy winter snows blow Yet through pain the nightime sky glows Is a mystery no one knows =============== OH Lizzie... this is exceptional ... first of all the ryhme scheme is just AWESOME... the cadence and flow had such rhythmn it just danced ... i could eat the unique line rhyme with a spoon..its divine.. the essence is like Sy said slightly Poeish its haunting and enchanting with its dark edges laced with the imagery of the snow.. and then the bittersweet emotions.. they touched me so ... this is simply awe inspiring work... one of my new favs by you... take care my sweet sweet poet of grace.. love you me |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks Kit, your words mean so much Victoria, Thank you for the lovely comment Bill, Thanks for the "gorgeous" Marge, Thanks for the words, but more for the hugs Sy, I'm not a Poe-ette. Tanks for your sweet comments Wilfred, You touch my heart Seraphin, Thanks so much JM, I'm so happy to see you back here, Your enthusiasm is contagious. You are sorely missed. Thanks for the sweet remarks Liz |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Total perfection here, Liz...loved the rhyme scheme...I'll print this one, if ya don't mind... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh Liz, this is such a beautiful piece. I'm so glad that you've decided to share this with us. I especally love the last stanza: "Why God makes a plan of sorrow Why do heavy winter snows blow Yet through pain the nightime sky glows Is a mystery no one knows" So true, my friend. False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the diffrence. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The reigning rhythym queen still rules....wonderful verse, Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--This poem touches me so with its questions that can't be answered...its pefect rhythm and flow...it it just so well done...Hugs! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, Elizabeth! I love the rhyme scheme too! Denise |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Liz...you've done it again... you'v made me sick at myself for not being able to rhyme.....lol. wonderfully done...simply beautiful. chris |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
serenity, Thank you for wanting to print it Love Bug, So glad you liked it Balladeer, Quite a compliment from the Meter Man Martie, Unanswered questions (Always a good topic) Thanks Denise. You have inspired me to write with your beautiful sonnet. Thank you so much chris, I wish I could write free verse. I find that much more difficult. Thank you Liz |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Lovely poem Elizabeth... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz - You have an incredibly classic sense of form and rhythm, combined with a wonderfully acute sense of consistency in your stories. This poem sings. Is it any wonder that I can never be happy with my own writing? Here's a hug - oh, that I could wrap arms around you and squeeze ever harder. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely superb!!! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 09-26-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I think I need to retake your class again. When is the next registration date? Liz, you pen such superbly beautiful verses and between you and Martie my eyes and my soul are quenched thoroughly in imagery and insight. Thank you for sharing as YOU. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Coco, Thank you so much Longjohn, I'll take the hug any day of the week. Thanks for the sweet comments Suthern, Thank you for reading and for your encouragement Mark, Sorry, I don't teach graduate courses. You are way beyond me. I think Martie's looking for a job, though, and she's much more qualified. Your responses always warm me Liz |
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grandiloquent Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 104Midwest America |
God, Elizabeth, this is gorgegous. The feeling, imagery, and layout... FABULOUS. |
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