Open Poetry #10 |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I am a baby, ...hopeless and small, I know not of knowledge, ...I speak not at all, Of things intellectual, ...no reason to care, Of hate and deception, ...I am unaware, Immobile and helpless, ...I cannot survive, If not for assistance, ...I'd be not alive, My needs are unending, ...forever I cry, What am I here for? ...answer me, why? You are our future, ...what someday will be, You are an acorn, ...a budding oak tree, Your needs they are simple, ...a mother's sweet milk, A blanket for comfort, ...for skin smooth as silk, You are a dear gift, ...from heavens above, You are an angel, ...a bundle of love, You are the destiny, ...of husband and wife, You are our tomorrows, ...you're our precious life. We are the children, ...fearless though small, We are the future, ...heed now our call, The world is our conquest, ...as we set sail, In our endeavors, ...never shall fail, We heed not dire warnings, ...of those gone ahead, For we are the living, ...we fear not the dead, What was is no longer, ...old ways forsaken, We seek our beginnings, ...new pathways are taken. You are our children, ...what know you of strife? Subtle temptations, ...perils of life? How can we warn you, ...revenge and vice, Alluring quicksands, ...know you the price? Our machinations, ...as snowflakes fall, Melting protestations, ...ignoring our call, As enter life's battle, ...how can one cope? 'Tis faith in humanity, ...in truth, faith, and hope. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 09-26-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
this is one of the most splendid and magnificent pieces about youth i have ever read. as a representative of today's youth, i think that this seems to cover all the aspects, to see from all the angles. what is expected of the children, how their innocence is traded for independence, how we just wanna go out there and make the world our own! it is quite amazing and refreshing to read. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Incredibly well done, Mike...but you always say things just right. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Bravo!!! Kathleen |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Mike, What an incredible poem Children are our greatest gift.. and you made that quite clear in this wonderful poem. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent |
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minstrel Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 21Bowling Green, KY |
Interesting insight on certain truths about being young. Well done! minstrel |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Oh my! I really love this. The entire piece draws you in, and holds you. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Ethan... I really appreciate the reply. Thanks for reading. Martie...*smile* Irish Rose...danke.. rosepetals... they definately are... now if I could just get one of my four to graduate from somewhere... hoot... thank ya kindly. mistel... I appreciate the reply. thanks. seraphin... thank you for the gracious reply. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey you...this is marvelous...I don't mean to sound surprised...but the different format was a surprise...very well done...this is quite a piece of art. I loved it. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Mike, What a wonderful piece of writing!! Great look at children . . . for they are truly our future. Great writing!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ The mommy in me LOVES it and recognizes each step on the stairway ... The used-to-be in me recognizes my own zealous efforts to do it my way ! Somewhere the two fronts meet ... and magic things happen. It did for me and it did for my own children. Oh, yeah .... that graduation thing ... See ... there ya' go ! You parent you ! Wonderfully well written. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Just as quickly as they are born and your in a hurry for them to grow up, They suddenly grow up and you realize it was like a poof!! Just that quick, beautiful poem |
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