»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #10
»
my rose
| Open Poetry #10 |
|
my rose |
|
|
Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
|
*this is a repost of an old fav. it comes via special request of JM, but i do hope the rest of y'all poetical people like it as well. enjoy* *My Rose* Falling in love; it hurts so much. The pain just grows as you're falling apart. But how is it that it hurts even more If i never had you from the start. Does any of this mean one damn thing? Is this all just wasted time i've spent? I always trip on the line that divides who I am and who I invent. Neither one of us will let the other in too deep. Too afraid of what the other's gonna think. All this pain and failure makes me feel like I've been living a hundred years. I can't remember ever sleeping without a pillow full of tears. My soul is abused and gone; I keep coming back for more. You're the prettiest rose in the garden; And I'm bleeding from the thorns. How can wanting to give you the world be something I shouldn't feel? Are cold shoulders and dodging eyes signs of emotions not so real? You never could really look me in the eye. Cover up your lies with all my truths. Haven't you heard? Love's a two-way street. I got a feeling I'm bein' used. The past always holds the better days. Then i tripped on the feeling of being alive. i mistook you for someone who gave a damn. The good memories are struggling to survive. I was on my knees, prayin' for rain. Didn't know I'd get a storm. You're the prettiest rose in the garden; and I'm bleeding from the thorns. Maybe someplace, far from now When I don't need to remember anymore, I'll stop by and pay you a visit to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor. While I'm there, I'd also like back my intensity and my attitude. And if you're finished, I'd like my soul and all the emotions you abused. If you could just take off your armor and leave your status home for the night. See the Me you always ignore. See the Me you could learn to like. Why am I the Runner-up whenever i run your race? But play the game inside my heart and you'll always get first place. Gave you my heart but you didn't seem to know what it was for. You're still the prettiest rose in the garden. And I'm still bleeding from the thorns. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Ethan Halo - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethan--wonderfully done--straight from the heart! |
||
|
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ethan... I'm glad JM requested this, as I think it's wonderful. "I can't remember ever sleeping without a pillow full of tears...." Oh, I can certainly relate to that, and I like the way you said it...... Great writing.... Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Does any of this mean one damn thing? Is this all just wasted time i've spent? I always trip on the line that divides who I am and who I invent. Neither one of us will let the other in too deep. Too afraid of what the other's gonna think. All this pain and failure makes me feel like I've been living a hundred years. I can't remember ever sleeping without a pillow full of tears. My soul is abused and gone; I keep coming back for more. You're the prettiest rose in the garden; And I'm bleeding from the thorns. =============================== Maybe someplace, far from now When I don't need to remember anymore, I'll stop by and pay you a visit to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor. While I'm there, I'd also like back my intensity and my attitude. And if you're finished, I'd like my soul and all the emotions you abused. ======================= Gave you my heart but you didn't seem to know what it was for. You're still the prettiest rose in the garden. And I'm still bleeding from the thorns. ================== oooooo I just LOVE getting my way  thank you for reposting ... it needs to be seen ... i still get the same awed feeling I did the first time I read it... you went way deep for this one E, and its way cool... later-my rose-poet-gator me |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
WOOHOO!!! i've discovered a POET... i've seen your name here but never really read you before now... if i did, i wasn't effected nearly as much as today... but, hey, i have friends who'd argue with that statement ....hehe this is a song... and it has some really great lines which sing the heart of a poet in a unique way... thank you for a great read... these lines jam! quote: ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If you could just take off your armor and leave your status home for the night. See the Me you always ignore. See the Me you could learn to like. Why am I the Runner-up whenever i run your race? But play the game inside my heart and you'll always get first place. Gave you my heart but you didn't seem to know what it was for. You're still the prettiest rose in the garden. And I'm still bleeding from the thorns. I am so glad that JM requested this and I am equally glad that you re-posted it. This is probably one of the best pieces I have read in here in a long time. There are alot of really good ones don't get me wrong but once in awhile there is one that just reaches deep and this is one of them. EXCELLENT WRITE AND SUPERB penning in flow, content, and cadence. |
||
|
pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
love it! needs to be read... sending it back up top... BUMP |
||
rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Ethan, I'm so glad Janet requested a repost..and that you listened  I missed this the first time..and I'm extremely glad I got to read it the second time. You are an incredable writer... showing such emotion and feeling with your words. I loved it ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
||
Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
was there either, and recognize the feelings....it hurts. |
||
|
Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I'm glad I had the chance to read this also, glad you reposted it! Kathleen |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
HAD to read this one again... another fave peace and poetry Ethan jm When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
