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...and I'll be over you, too - response poem to Balladeer
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...and I'll be over you, too - response poem to Balladeer |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Although he whispers sweet with poems that ring true I still hear your voice, my mind still pictures you. The changing of the seasons seem lusterless these days knowing you won't be there coloring autumn's haze. When winter rolls around and I decorate the tree I'll be dreaming of you smiling here with me. When stars become supernovas the earth a darkened moon I'll finally forget if I forget that soon. Corinne |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Beautiful; The pen shows true love. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
this is so beautiful - it truly deserves it's own posting - thank you Corinne  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this is a beautiful reply poem, loved the last verse. Park |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
WOW! hey, i'm speechless... lol... do you believe that? moi? that's the only thing i could think of to say... WOW! oh well, it's sunday and i was indulging in some mid-day wine... but at least i can still type!!! lol... for a while anyway... as always, Corinne, fine writing. cheers!  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
One of the terrific things I've always enjoyed about this site is the way we feed off of each other's creativity and inspiration. You did very well with this one, Corinne, and I am complimented by your thought |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow*...great reply....love it Charisma |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, inot2b! Thank you for suggesting it, Bill! Park, thank you, hon! Doreen, thank you very much! I'm a huge fan of your writing! Thank you, Balladeer, I was quite moved by your poem, as you can see! Thanks, Charisma! Corinne |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Core, a very beautiful response poem from a very beautiful poet. Love, Rick I'll add a new comment to Balladeer's poem and bring it back up with this one. |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
bumping this one back up closer to Balladeer's |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Core, your response poem reminded me of an old response poem of mine that turned into a collaboration. Still Night ~ Does the wind still blow my touch across your face, and sweep the hair from your eyes? ~ . The wind that blows across me now . blows touches that I can't recall, . and yet they're etched inside. ~ Can your mind still gaze upon sunsets fresh from memory, without sensing my presence in each fading ray? ~ . The sunsets here have beauty, but . the warmth has set before the sun . has made it's daily slide. ~ Will the moon still hold the same moment when wrapped in blankets we tiptoed in flesh to bathe in the oceans tide? ~ . Those silver beams reach out to me - . they play upon my memories - . they warm my thirsty flesh. ~ When still night approaches is it my caress you remember that satisfied the innermost part of your spirit? ~ . I still, at night, recall your touch - . how tender passion fed my blush . and thrilled my soul with rest. ~ Is it my name you still whisper when drawn into the bed of love making, and is it my face you see reflected in her eyes? ~ . Oh, yes! The nights claim such faint sounds . when I breathe out that precious noun, . and see you in her eyes. ~ © S.M.A. 1/18/98 / RAM 1/31/98 |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Corinne Well I already told Bal I loved his poem...so now my credit goes to you. Excellent piece hon. I always enjoy reading your work...theres something so serene about it. take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, RAM for that poignant collaborative poem! Thank you, Aimster, what a lovely thing to say! Corinne |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful Corinne! This had a lovely flow ... what a wonderful response. I very much enjoyed this piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you for the kind words, Kit! Corinne |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Corinne, I really enjoyed this, an excellent read. Dee |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like this one |
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