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For Him |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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For Him She came to him, there, and entered deep his soul and felt now he, awash, as if upon a craggy shoal she swept words to his heart, as if they had been tethered there, forever, shall she be, until the end of never she breathed breath into his heart, where she lightly stroked a chord, a spell, a place not met, but where he stoked the flame of her in his voice, and again then in his rhyme to promise between the two of them, yes, there’ll be the time where they shall meet and gaze and whisper, a kiss upon her ear and he shall know just how to sweep her up in midnight’s clear and lay her upon the rose-strewn bed, a bower made for her and she shall shower him anew, he has never been so sure. She came to him, there, and entered deep his soul She breathed breath into his heart, where she lightly stroked And they shall meet and gaze and whisper, a kiss upon her ear And she will hold his heart so soft, and whisper to him, “dear”. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea (aka Erin Brocavich)  Mmmmm - this is so loving - so warm - so heartfelt - Exactly as I imagine truly great love shared to be. ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - It's great seeing you write in this style. I love the promise of love that you plant here so well. This is quite lovely, as are you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you William... LJA, shall I write this way again? Yes, I think I shall...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow* great writing, especially the first line "She came to him, there, and entered deep his soul" shows allready the love that comes from within....really enjoyed reading it  ) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
I think this is one of your best ever, all your poems are a cut above but this is exceptionally lovely. I love this truly take care Marsha  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Charisma, your wow is charming, thank you... Marsha, now, don't tell anyone I pay you for all of these lovely responses... thank you both! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sunshine, this poem put a silent pause in my breath as I read each verse... Coco |
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susanbartee Member
since 2000-08-15
Posts 119Channelview, TX USA |
Oh Sunshine, this is absolutely beautiful as with all your poetry. I have to agree above that I think this is one of your best also. Enjoyed reading it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Coco, your response alone is a song in itself, thank you... Susan, thank you so much for coming to read...I enjoy seeing your name... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
 That's really all I can say. . . amazing. . . That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Well .... you romantic little devil !  This is lovely. Send check !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well now this in definitely one heck of a romantic piece. I have read this at least 4 times and I am sure I will read it again. I must say that you have penned quite the essence of hopeless romantics in the heart. I am in awe at it's beauty and YES please do write like this again. I like this side of you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I agree with all the above but especially with Marge. *L* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sven, thank you... Marge, nah, I'm an angel in disguise... Mark, only if your own love lets you... Seymour, you're too kind, thank you... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Karilea! Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you denise...glad to see you working on some down time... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is tender and beautifully written...I truly love this one Karilea....today I read YOURS in a whisper...just fabulous! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity, sometimes, all poems should be whispered... because that is when the heart hears... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, I still think this is one of your best, although it's hard to pick, an excellant, from a stunning. This is so totally beautiful, I really think that this is my favourite. (well that is at this moment) Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, you're too good for me... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I am astounded that I missed this one! Karilea, this is incredible romantic writing filled with love, longing and promise. If anyone could breathe breath into a man's heart, I'm sure you could...and, yes, there is always a right time for true love. This is beautiful... If you whisper, I will listen....  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Our song is the voice of desire, that haunts our dreams, A throe of the heart, Whose pining visions dim, forbidden hopes profound, No dying cadence, nor long sigh can sound, For all our art. ===================== How did I miss this? What they all said, above, times 10! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
well now, since MY CHECK, for comments, didn't come in this week, I'm just gonna say something simple, like I loved it, it was wonderful, and yes, write some more like it...and when my check comes in, I'll change all this and say something NICE. jwesley |
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