Open Poetry #10 |
--- If I See You Everyday --- |
The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
--- If I See You Everyday --- ~ If I see you every day forever I will always recall that night. I will recall how despite her best Efforts, nature could not distract me from you. ~ Despite the sparkle of night lights That the tiny waves threw at me, My eyes could not leave the sparkle of yours. My mind could not leave you. ~ Beneath the mournful beauty of the Rhapsodies of the circling terns, My ears could not release the rhythm Of your soft breathing. ~ Shrouded in the cool comforting Breeze that the lake blew upon us, Your embrace was all I felt Your hair was all I smelled. ~ You won that night. Pitted against all the beauty that Nature could bring to bear At that time, in that place. ~ If I see you every day forever I will always recall that night. Some men see things as they are and ask "WHY ?" I see things as they could be and ask "WHY NOT ?" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
So nice to get lost in those special moments isn't it? Loved the flow in this as well and the cadence....went with the message superbly. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
How very beautiful...and how very lucky this person is |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Thank You Mark & Paula ..... I wonder if any of you can pick out the book that provided the inspiration for that poem. It was inspired by a line from a book. I mention this for two reasons: 1) I think you'd all be shocked at the character who uttered the line. 2) When I take anything from another work, even a single line (as is the case here) I always cite the source. GUESSES anyone ?? [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-02-2000).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
TLS~ I have no idea, but this is so beautiful. Earned a *SIGH* -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
yep you said it perfect...when that special someone comes around.....nothing will ever be the same...great poem and nope me neither...don't know, but will check back to see the quote |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I LIKED IT!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Well, I'm stumped. . . but the poem is just wonderful. . . Excellent. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
In Thomas Harris' sequel to "The Sinece Of The Lambs" titled "Hannibal", Dr. Hannibal Lecter utters the words "If I see you everyday forever, I will never forget how you look tonight" to Clarice Starling. I thought regardless of the source, what a wonderful thing to feel. It took me back to one night with one person, so I wrote. It was nice to hear something nice on one of my few ventures out of my normal style. Thanks for the encouragement now I'm off to read some of your works. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LonelyStranger~ 'Despite the sparkle of night lights That the tiny waves threw at me, My eyes could not leave the sparkle of yours.' Someone left you a beautiful memory. Exquisitely perfect ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh*.....this is so beautiful. can't imagine that you are lonely ..love it.. Charisma |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Marge, Charisma ..... thanks for the encouragement. If, I'm not Lonely Char, then someone must be tiptoeing around right behind me. Because I see no one. Well, maybe one day. (hummmmm) that gives me an idea. |
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