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Four Times |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Why not touch me? four times the wind has crossed your path, and though you laugh, I know there's hurt within your hidden heart. And so we dance, cavorting resorting to indifference, pretending our loves not bending, like melting steel, damn it, you feel, and so do I. And so the four winds blow, scattering songs, we thought belonged only, to you and I. Send me flowers, hours we spent, naked on the ground, stumble, tumble round, where kisses turned to sweat and murmured passion. Four times the wind, has filtered brilliance has handed one chance to us, and as your hair dances, and weaves in the breeze, if you want, I fall to knees grazed and bleeding, and tell you I still love you all the more. Four times the wind, has come and gone, you and I belong, and the wind fades to quiet, at last. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sometimes it just takes a little more effort in trust than others....excellent read from you |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fool, would that the four winds had stolen stolen your vioce away. Then I would not sigh in deep contemplation of the picture you paint. Then I would not cry for love scattered or faint. Then I would not bleed for the heart torn asunder. Then I would hear your voice written on the thunder. You don't post often but when you do. "it's magic"Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Mark~ My thanks,Im glad you enjoyed it *smile* Kethry~ Deary me Keth,your reply was more beautiful than the poem lol,thanxs for reading it *grin* |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
fool- wow...such sadness here, and such deep emotion. wonderful write.  -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Fool, I'd rather be the fool, and live with the memories...I loved this piece! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Fool~ A render to remember ... 'Four times the wind, has come and gone, you and I belong, and the wind fades to quiet, at last.' I enjoyed the little internal rhymes also. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Vicky~My thanks for your comments Vicky *smile* tulip~ Im glad you enjoyed it Tulip,I agree, being a fool is the best way sometimes lol. Marge~fool takes the slender hand of Marge in his own,leans forward,and kisses it gently. "Always nice to hear from you M'lady,thankyou for taking the time to comment,Im glad you liked it" |
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