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a thing too fine
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a thing too fine |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A new day yet, of unaware-- fight with sorrow this day's stare... an octopus of keeping time, thesauraus-- terms of love, defined. A blanket warm, bereft of kiss, words of love without the bliss, the silence of something amiss, the promise of a thing too fine... take it, from me, if you can, I'll take it-- I'll be better than, everything I was before... TAKE IT. Before, I ask for more... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
I've read over this several times and each time I see a little deeper into it, actually a little deeper into me, you have a great style I'll be enjoying your work, believe me! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Is there really 'a thing too fine?' I've always searched for it, but never found! This poem, my friend, is full of meaning to be thought on, and I love the way you put it all together!~! Nice work!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...yes TAKE it...isnt that all we ever ask? For someone to take what we offer? You touch me with this one |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Way TOO fine as is the poet that wrote it.  Wonderful penning from you this morning my friend. Something amiss??? Did he miss??? Not this cowboy!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A new day yet, of unaware-- fight with sorrow this day's stare... an octopus of keeping time, thesauraus-- terms of love, defined. A blanket warm, bereft of kiss, words of love without the bliss, the silence of something amiss, the promise of a thing too fine... ==================== *shaking my head* *smiling* .. OK...it must be something in the water there in MardiGras land .. damn girl ... the first verse alone knocked my metaphorical socks off!! I LOVE this poem .. I LOVE the way your mind works!! I gotta get me some of that something fine  had a taste of it ... leaves ya needing more as in ... being baptized in it ... which brings me back to the water there *feeling a humid breeze coming up from the south* me loves ya me twin me |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
as i've said, i always have to read yours twice, but this one i took in sections. your style is so enigmatic and magnificent! you ooze talent, i just want to say. actually, i think i caught more than a couple of the meanings in this one. usually i only get one or two, but this time around... very well penned! Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thing too fine so sublime a heart all mine. . . wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Much love and grats to all, I really appreciate your support....oh, is that Bartles & James? But I truly thank you all, hope to be back soon to read your work as well...Hugs to all. |
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