Open Poetry #10 |
Keening of the Soul's Regret |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Each and all, a heart's hope, chancing, all that's left a heart romancing, looking for the smooth rock stone I wish to hold you-- You are my own. And if I could, I'd carve your wood in measures still as yet, unsung. Sanded, now as fine as silk, betrayal, 'neath the eyes of hood, the victor's spoils of days too young every stitch remains, uncounted... and oh my tears the grief surmounted-- I'd be with you, if but I could. Heed the call. Chance, but a glancing... Heed the call. His song, entrancing... weep of heart a blood's surpassing... I'd be with you, if but I could... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The regretful sighs of yesterdays indulgences and tomorrows promises upon given chance. Excellent write my friend. It is never easy but you will find the strength in it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have that smooth rock stone, serenity, and I know the keening...thank you for sharing... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ I just want to hug you .... and so I do ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You are fast becoming one of my favorite writers! This is wonderful..and I certainly relate to the last verse! |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Beautiful! I take your words with me as I leave for my day. Poet deVine's thoughts are mine, too. [This message has been edited by seraphin (edited 09-30-2000).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
if only wishing could make it so my friend. . . if only. . . so, I keep wishing. . . just excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hi angelheart! Loved your reply! (and oops! didn't know it was showing...LOL &Hugs) Sunshine---thank you for reading and the warm welcome that you have always shown to me..Thank you twice. Mom--------hugging you back! Pdv-----your reply was like a Joyous Breeze! and about that last verse...hmmm...maybe later, LOL sighs, smiles and thanks, can't wait to get to Faradiddle... seraphin---I'm already an admirer of yours, so I thank you bunches... Sven---Kind of hard NOT to wish upon certain stars, especially when they shine so brilliantly! *wink* and thanks. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Each and all, a heart's hope, chancing, all that's left a heart romancing, looking for the smooth rock stone I wish to hold you-- You are my own. And if I could, I'd carve your wood in measures still as yet, unsung. Sanded, now as fine as silk, betrayal, 'neath the eyes of hood, ==================== you'd carve his wood??? OH MAN ..NOW thats a line I wish Id of wrote damn i wish id wrote this whole poem ... seems of late...i feel like that every read Hmmm???? so what you been eating for breakfast?? same thing SY is??? he wouldnt tell me either when i asked how he writes so cool ... I KNOW ..its the raspberry tea LOVE this one ...so cool..so deep...SO YOU *kisskiss* me |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Serenity, this poem is as smooth as that stone..I like it very much You would carve my wood?? You must like me a whittle!! |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
This flows ohhhh so beautifully ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -me, Song of Gesture |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
LMAO, JM, was wondering who was going to pick up on that one, and you are right, that line is so YOU...(or is it me?) Love ya much baby... chanson---thank you for your kindness, and I will be reading your work shortly....my apologies as it is getting harder and harder to keep up with everybody... and speaking of harder... BALLADEER? Well! Do I Wike you a Whittle? I was sort of hoping there was a Wot of you to Wove!!! *winks* from the serenely naughty...wow... Waugh Out Woud? [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You touched some really deep spots in me with this one Serenity positively beautiful [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 10-01-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, an excellent write and a most splendid read... There's several verses here that in ways seem to have touched me as I read through your poem... Thank you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wils---a much belated thank you...still very much appreciated...HUGS Coco---ya did it again! and I thank you, I'm in the middle of some badass writer's block..and you have helped. HUGS lady. Appreciate this much. |
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