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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-09-30 12:05 PM


               How can I say it?

               let me see, how can I say it,
               oh, here, yes,
               let me query
               if you could    
               kiss my lipstick off
               would it be slow
               or in a hurry?

               If you could muss my
               hair a bit
               and leave me    
               breathless and flushed
               would it surprise
               you at all
               that you can make
               me blush?

               now let me ask
               would you get
               two left feet
               if we tried to dance
               on down the street?

               or could we take
               it slow and sure,
               and sway to a romantic
               overture
               and in the moonlight
               and a sonata
               in the air
               could I find my
               senses
               in your stare?

               and if I begin to cry
               from sheer joy
               of the here
               and now
               would you find
               a way somehow
               to kiss my lipstick off
               and quell the
               salty tears?

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
29 September, 2000



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SEA
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1 posted 2000-09-30 12:09 PM


Sunshine~ Now, you know this is really very good, I really like the kissing the lipstick off!   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-09-30 12:51 PM


You can say it just like that girl!!  Wonderful!  Wonderful!  Wonderful!  

--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

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3 posted 2000-09-30 04:18 AM


Sunshine~
This is excellent, very enjoyable read  
Loved the flow as well...way to go girl
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


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4 posted 2000-09-30 04:35 AM


Karilea, is that's what meant by kicking over the traces, I love this poem. Beautifully put, sheer poetry.
                Marsha
              

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5 posted 2000-09-30 04:58 AM


Hmmmm , me thinks that slow would be in order and of course some dance lessons as well.  Excellent poem Karilea, and now I have thoughts in my head and no-one to turn them to!!!!!  In time though I suppose, in time....she will be in my arms.  Yeah, positive thinking.   
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6 posted 2000-09-30 08:44 AM


SEA, TA and Tracie, thanks bunches...this particular line got stuck in my head like a scratched record [and I'm probably the only one here at the moment that recall what THEY are...] so thanks bunches...

c'mon Mark, you're putting me on, right? no one there? unbelieveable...but I'll boost you and raise one "positive thinking" with my best wishes for you and yours...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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7 posted 2000-09-30 09:16 AM


Karilea,

I'd kiss your lipstick if Lorelei,
Didn't promise that I would die.
But she is vigilant, on her guard,
She won't let me out of the yard!


I really enjoyed this poem once I figured out the structure.  Splitting lines like that was tricky, you lil devil!

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8 posted 2000-09-30 09:25 AM


"or could we take
it slow and sure,
and sway to a romantic
overture"

Wonderful Sunshine ... I loved the format and thoughts you've used here, beautiful writing!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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9 posted 2000-09-30 10:56 AM


LJA, Kit, this was truly to have been a free verse piece...I find myself happier to allow the pen to flow without requisite construction lately...I think they could be referred to as heartsounds to describe it correctly...

thank you both for your kind replies...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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10 posted 2000-09-30 11:10 AM


Karilea~

'How can I say it?....'

Well, you could try -
just like you did !

Wonderful form from you.
~*Marge*~


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11 posted 2000-09-30 02:42 PM


Marge, the thought of having lipstick kissed off is well....yummm....hummmm....thanks for reading...

Karilea
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12 posted 2000-09-30 02:53 PM


Nope we are seperated by borders of states and commitments.....wouldn't kid about that but I do know that we will have our day.  There, you didn't think I came back and read the responses to my replies did ya??  (where ya been anyway.....haven't you read my poems and figured it out yet????LOL..) just teasing you.  I Know you have.
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13 posted 2000-09-30 04:12 PM


Mark, I'm sure she'll fly into your arms, give it time...patience is a virtue...[I DO recall how you were patient with Quinella...]

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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14 posted 2000-09-30 04:20 PM


Like Mark - If I were not committed - (not a strong enough word) - I'd find a way to find myself there and there'd be no trace of lipstick - JMHO - but you've got to be wonderful - based on the poetry you write
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15 posted 2000-09-30 07:30 PM


Sunshine,
         it looks like you already did my friend. . .

Wonderful. . .  

---------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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16 posted 2000-10-02 12:00 PM


Mr. Yeats, Sven, lovely comments add to my smiles this morning, thank you, gentlemen, very much...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


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17 posted 2000-10-02 12:09 PM


OH,HOW CAN I SAY ,I JUST LOVE READING YOUR POETRY,SUNSHINE!!!!
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18 posted 2000-10-02 12:16 PM


OH,HOW CAN I SAY ,I JUST LOVE READING YOUR POETRY,SUNSHINE!!!!
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19 posted 2000-10-31 11:06 AM


Vandana, I guess you can say it twice! LOL! What a way to go!

Karilea
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20 posted 2000-10-31 11:15 AM


Enjoy the read!!!!!!!
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21 posted 2000-11-05 01:57 PM


you're cute, Vandana...thank you...{~,^}

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



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22 posted 2000-11-05 02:09 PM


~You know,...you have so many wonderful works on these pages,...I'm enjoying you muchly this Sunday afternoon. Splendid choice of wording here,...thanks for sharing it. *Peace.
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