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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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How can I say it? let me see, how can I say it, oh, here, yes, let me query if you could kiss my lipstick off would it be slow or in a hurry? If you could muss my hair a bit and leave me breathless and flushed would it surprise you at all that you can make me blush? now let me ask would you get two left feet if we tried to dance on down the street? or could we take it slow and sure, and sway to a romantic overture and in the moonlight and a sonata in the air could I find my senses in your stare? and if I begin to cry from sheer joy of the here and now would you find a way somehow to kiss my lipstick off and quell the salty tears? ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 29 September, 2000 |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ Now, you know this is really very good, I really like the kissing the lipstick off!  -SEA |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
You can say it just like that girl!! Wonderful! Wonderful! Wonderful!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sunshine~ This is excellent, very enjoyable read Loved the flow as well...way to go girl Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karilea, is that's what meant by kicking over the traces, I love this poem. Beautifully put, sheer poetry. Marsha  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hmmmm , me thinks that slow would be in order and of course some dance lessons as well. Excellent poem Karilea, and now I have thoughts in my head and no-one to turn them to!!!!! In time though I suppose, in time....she will be in my arms. Yeah, positive thinking.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, TA and Tracie, thanks bunches...this particular line got stuck in my head like a scratched record [and I'm probably the only one here at the moment that recall what THEY are...] so thanks bunches... c'mon Mark, you're putting me on, right? no one there? unbelieveable...but I'll boost you and raise one "positive thinking" with my best wishes for you and yours... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea, I'd kiss your lipstick if Lorelei, Didn't promise that I would die. But she is vigilant, on her guard, She won't let me out of the yard! I really enjoyed this poem once I figured out the structure. Splitting lines like that was tricky, you lil devil! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"or could we take it slow and sure, and sway to a romantic overture" Wonderful Sunshine ... I loved the format and thoughts you've used here, beautiful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LJA, Kit, this was truly to have been a free verse piece...I find myself happier to allow the pen to flow without requisite construction lately...I think they could be referred to as heartsounds to describe it correctly... thank you both for your kind replies... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ 'How can I say it?....' Well, you could try - just like you did ! Wonderful form from you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge, the thought of having lipstick kissed off is well....yummm....hummmm....thanks for reading... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Nope we are seperated by borders of states and commitments.....wouldn't kid about that but I do know that we will have our day. There, you didn't think I came back and read the responses to my replies did ya?? (where ya been anyway.....haven't you read my poems and figured it out yet????LOL..) just teasing you. I Know you have. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, I'm sure she'll fly into your arms, give it time...patience is a virtue...[I DO recall how you were patient with Quinella...] Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Like Mark - If I were not committed - (not a strong enough word) - I'd find a way to find myself there and there'd be no trace of lipstick - JMHO - but you've got to be wonderful - based on the poetry you write |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sunshine, it looks like you already did my friend. . . Wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats, Sven, lovely comments add to my smiles this morning, thank you, gentlemen, very much... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
OH,HOW CAN I SAY ,I JUST LOVE READING YOUR POETRY,SUNSHINE!!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
OH,HOW CAN I SAY ,I JUST LOVE READING YOUR POETRY,SUNSHINE!!!! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Vandana, I guess you can say it twice! LOL! What a way to go! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoy the read!!!!!!! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
you're cute, Vandana...thank you...{~,^} Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~You know,...you have so many wonderful works on these pages,...I'm enjoying you muchly this Sunday afternoon. Splendid choice of wording here,...thanks for sharing it. *Peace. |
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