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Enchanted Reversal |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
She wandered through the forest Through the thick brush and the trees. Trying to find her way out As she stumbled to her knees. Now standing there before her Was an ugly little troll. His hair was green and his eyes were pink And on the tip of his nose was a mole. Startled by the sight of him She jumped up to her feet. Looking in every direction Not knowing which way to retreat. Backing herself in a corner Her heart was pumping fast. Trying to decide Just how to run on past. But suddenly her heart stopped As she looked at the little guy. He was reaching out his hand to her As a tear fell from his eye. He swallowed hard and said, "Please don't run away. I'm all alone in this forest I too, don't want to stay. I once ran into a wicked old hag And she put a spell on me. She turned me into an ugly troll I'm really not what you see." He said, "if you kiss me on my cheek a handsome prince I will be. I'll take you to my castle And keep you there with me. She gave it a moment and thought, why not. This just may be my lucky day. She closed her eyes and gave him a kiss, And in a puff of smoke she was whisked away. When the smoke had finally settled And she was able to look around. In the water under a bridge she saw her reflection. And an ugly little "she" troll she found. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Eloise~ THIS IS FANTASTIC!!! I wish I could write them like this.......  -SEA |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eloise, encore, Do it again... backwards. I loved it. Bravo Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eloise~ This was delightful ! Gotta watch those tricky little 'he'-trolls ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Applause here Eloise!!! Wonderful story ... what a great twist for a conclusion. I enjoyed this from beginning to end, still smiling! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
SEA, I've read yours and you can! Thank you so much. Thanks Kethry, The backwards thought came to mind as I was midway through this write. Marge, thanks for your delightful and "always" watch out for that he-troll! Thank you Kit. Coming from you, I am honored. |
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Tears_of_Grace Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 50 |
You had me laughing so hard! I've never seen a poem like this one but it is indeed a treat to see. Bravo! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
This is indeed Fantastic... so many great visual images....enjoyed! Greeneyes |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Tears of Grace and Greeneyes, thank you both for reading and commenting. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. It was just as fun writing it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Eloise I believe Love is like this...sometimes we just have to take a chance on Love...in fact we can not resist...not knowing the outcome...sometimes good and sometimes bad...but we had to take that chance...James |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is delightful, Eloise! I loved the surprise ending......hehehe Denise |
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