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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sandalwood The fabric of your voice is a feather I think that finds the curve of my spine and traces it slowly It is colored with vibrant and can measure a moment with listening black velvet that breathes in my circumference Sow a place here in this room and cover me with deep words short words whispered words words that fibrillate my center Sing to me your vibrato torch my ear with listening you walk across my life now like new grass…you grass You are who I am and have laid me down again and again across the tapestry for I have seen you in between minutes watching and taking the path that brings me to the reach of your melting tongue and your skin of sandalwood |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ok - so I SO had my mouth hanging open here... BLEW me away... The fabric of your voice is a feather I think that finds the curve of my spine and traces it slowly WOW You just rock Martie. That's all I can say hey? Hugs.  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Martie I've never asked another poet to explain their poem to me, but what does this one mean. It seems you have expressed yourself very well, but understanding it is where I fail. I guess you can tell that if it doesn't rhyme, the poem kinda blows my mind. Hopefully by asking this is not an insult because it's not what I meant. I just thought that I would try a different comment. But I would like to know.  Garfield |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Fillibrate your center??? Oh MArtie!  A wonderful piece of soul music is this poem....love it |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderfully written Martie... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie,you are incredible, you are amazing, extraordinary! I just love reading you sweet one. Thank You |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Reading the texture of your words Like gentle fur of kittens Woven in soft silk Or the luxury of satin sheets There’s a music in your words Measure for measure Their harmonies are celestial Taking me to the spheres And the color of them Shaded with the warmth of yellows Heated with the hues of reds Cooled with the sparkle of Varigated eyes I immerse myself in your words No waterfall No Jacuzzi No icy pool Stimulates me to the core As do your metaphors and phrases So play on your music Paint on – redecorate my life Set my bed in satin I can ask no more |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie~ WOW!! this is like a lover's dance,slow and powerful! -SEA |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Incredible Martie.....your imagery is unique and phenomenal, as always. You continue to truly blow me away with your talent. *Krista Knutson* "Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whew...took me away in warp time to other places...sigh... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and can measure a moment with listening black velvet that breathes in my circumference Sow a place here in this room and cover me with deep words short words whispered words words that fibrillate my center ================ and its quite a thing to behold ..."your circumference" jeeesh....and i thought my ache was deep ... "fibrallate my center" i dont even know where my center is  damn your cool ... way cool later-need-oxygen-gator me |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
across the grassy knolls of your being cherished the words of play and praise and upon the rising of tomorrows sun let there be not only sandalwood but that of the purest scents in essence greeting the dew filled morns as honeysuckle dreams and melons breathe in the titilating response to nature's all and forever my grass will stay from erosion upon breasted hill within the center of your circumference refreshing you in the seeds of tomatoes ripened and petals pure. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-30-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW beautifully written. LOved it. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Ahhhhhhhhhh ! 'Sing to me your vibrato torch my ear with listening you walk across my life now like new grass…you grass You are who I am and have laid me down again and again across the tapestry' Beautifully played. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"It is colored with vibrant and can measure a moment with listening black velvet that breathes in my circumference" Oh Martie ... I don't know how you do it, but you surely do every time. Amazing wording and incredible imagery softly whispers through this read. Just beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla...thanks...now close you mouth...and by the way...you rock too! Garfield--Okay, say you are listening to some music and the voice is so beautiful it makes you feel wonderful...then you describe it using the senses to explain how it makes you feel....does that help? I don't mind at all that you asked, by the way. Thanks for your interest. Balladeer--thanks...I'm glad you liked it. Hi Mike--thanks for stopping to let me know you enjoyed this poem. Maree--You say the nicest things...thanks for the enthusiasm! Wow! Bill---what a beautiful verse! Thank you for the beautiful words...they blew me away. Sea--A lovers dance...what a nice way to look at it...thank you. Krista--Thanks for letting me know that you enjoyed the read...I appreciate the reply! Karilea--Glad to have taken you on a trip...thanks for letting me know. Janet my friend, you of all people know where you center is...glad to see you here!! Do you get another weekend out for good behavior? Mark--Your beauitul words gladden my heart...thank you for your friendship. brian--thanks for the wow...I just love that word. Marge--thanks hon...you are always so sweet. Kit--I sure appreciate the way you reply...thank you! |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Martie Thanks for explaining that to me. I went back and read this piece again and I could dance along with that song you were hearing. I could also dance along with many that repeat in my mind. Thanks again. This was extremely beautiful. Garfield |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey look what I can do........I can bump you to the top.LOL....did you know that ..... they gave me this special power to do that. Ain't they just wonderful???  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - Martie, now this is your best! The images in here are outstanding, you blow me away. Your words took me to another world.Melissa~ |
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