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Nature's Refrain
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Nature's Refrain |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
 The rain continues to pour Steadily outside my door Dampness sets slowly in I search for where to begin Lightning flashes on the wall As thunder crashes down the hall The wind bends the trees Blowing around all the leaves I hear them rustle outside Their range is very wide They tumble through the night Occasionally taking flight Shadows dance upon the ground Never do they make a sound Puddles shimmer in the rain I sit in awe of nature's refrain Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a "keeper" for me LoneWolf...I love storms, and this is just perfect. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
what a soothing poem. that let me slow down and remember i'd been holding my breath! fantastic imagery. to the library with this one! "Lightning flashes on the wall As thunder crashes down the hall" loved those lines... i read your signature, and by that rationale, this poem has done the job well. "And yesterday went by so quick it seems like it was just a day." |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~This is great...I love storms!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Well .. I just happen to think that this is an EXCEPTIONAL render ! The graphic sets it off ... but the thunderous refrain of the raining of your thoughts is awesome ! Wonderful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Fabulous! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A keeper for sure.....love the way you brought the storm to us. I also love a good storm and you have penned a superb rendering of one in your words. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
serenity . . . They have a wonder all their own. Thank you my friend. Ethan . . . Thank you so much. Please breathe!! LOL. The power of the storm always leaves me awestruck. I just write what I feel.  Beth . . . Thanks!! Thunderstorms intrigue me. Marge . . . WOW!! An exceptional from the queen of poetry? I am honored and humbled!! I cannot tell you what your words mean to me, my friend. I am happy to hear you liked it . . . it just poured out when I was listening to the thunder and watching the lightning outside at night. Thanks a million, my friend. Eagle One . . . Hi there!! Thanks for the read. Mark . . . Thankd for reading. I do try to make it as realistic as I can so that others can see it through my eyes. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is beautiful and needs to make the rounds again, don't you think? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*bump* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
*thanks to serenity for the bump* This is great LW. . . I can really see that you're growing here. . . Excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Beautiful work my friend...a good storm always washes away the dust in your eyes...we all need that every now and then. Wonderfully penned~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep! Very beautifully done! Denise |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I can hear the storm.... beautiful piece from your hand.Charisma |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kathleen . . . Thank you my friend. I knew this would be a good one. Serenity . . . Thanks for the bump!! LOL Sven . . . Thank you my friend. I can see you are too. BDC . . . So true and yes, we all need that from time to time my friend. Thanks!! Denise . . . Thank you!! Charisma . . . Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jen~ Exceptional piece of poetry my friend, very enjoyable Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Oooo I love storms. This paints an awestruck picture... I love the last line. ~ Beth |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Tracie . . . Thank you my friend. Happy you enjoyed. Beth . . . I love them too. Thanks for reading!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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