Open Poetry #10 |
Vidalia [for doreen] |
Sunshine
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Vidalia ~ / A thin layer of skin wraps and warps around thee hiding so many other layers of sweet, sweet taste O Vidalia, sweet song of taste in layer upon layer of opaque design by His own hand, forever command all taste buds this luscious, delicious, delightful delicacy Georgian luxuries cannot compete the love complete betwixt mouth and sweetest onion’s skin, a devilment of joy itself, complete union with onion’s ting and bite so raw and sugared just so, wrapped with butter and bread ah sweeter still when whitest flesh hits the heat all sugars come to the forefront and luscious luscious luscious thrills of magic bulbous satisfaction in each face a reaction to heaven’s gift, of you O lovely, lovely, sweet Vidalia we are yet so glad heaven made ya. ////////// \\\\\\ Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 09-28-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey this reminds me of a country song that is on the charts NOW!!!!! I thought that they were singing of the onion and the town but NOW I know they are singing of DOREEN!!!!!!! Wow, a better poet to sing about there could not be. You made even the thought of her words taste delicioius. Well penned and such a lovely tribute. |
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BSC
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Posts 2919New York, USA |
You are just so clever Karilea....Whoda ever thought about writing about an onion.... And then, done such a great job???? Only you m'dear......Love this one. Bonnie |
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Martie
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This is wonderful, karilea...making me hungry, and Doreen's poetry is wonderful, and inspires me to write more, better...delicious! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, With out your sunshine know How would this vidalia grow? Clever and well done. |
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Sunshine
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Mark, you're turn to spark doreen's light... Bonnie...if doreen can do oranges, I can lay[er] one down too... Martie, doreen's good at making us all get inspired...and hungry... Sy, I never know what's going to bring you in but I'm glad this did...thank you Sir Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - You have defined Doreen perfectly - so many layers, and each a delight, but all of them enough to make a grown man cry. And don't EVEN get me started on the part about peeling them off one by one. I'm just a weak man, yanno! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent. . . I always knew that Doreen was a multi-faceted, multi-layered person. . . but an onion?? This is great Sunshine. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey karilea!!! i peeled the layers down on this one and it brought tears to my eyes... lovely writing, my dear friend... how in the heck can you all make all these graphic designs with poetry??? i need quark express, photoshop and illustrator... LOL... and my PowerMac - G4 me? hehe this is great, really really special and the comments were too much because you were talking about an onion and layering really great images... for all those who responded thinking i'm an onion, i say this... i CAN bring tears to your eyes so don't slice too deep... *wink* nice job, sunshinyone... thank you and oh... btw, i wrote a poem called "layers" also about peeling an onion... and when i find it, i'll drop by here and post the thread... i think they may be companion poems of a sort luvya! |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, Sunshine, you have outdone yourself here. The poem is beautifully done, well-constructed and a fine tribute to one of the most gifted poets, not to mention nicest people, I have had the privelege to know. Applause here, Karilea! |
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Denise
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Very creative, Karilea! Beautifully done! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ WOW ! You're spicing up the forums with these lovely word art pieces ! Now everyone knows Doreen is a blooming onion ! Such a SWEET tribute to the Vidalia and to Ms. Doreen. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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LJA, so nice to know how you feel... Sven, we can all come in many forms... doreen, "companion" poems - yes - to be lined up under you, beside you...that is the truest compliment I could ever have, so my thanks go to you for inspiring me all along! 'Deer, I am curtseying - deeply...thank you... hey denise, thanks for coming in! Miss your face! Marge, our spirits do tend to sometimes reside in mysterious places... thanks everyone... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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