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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Neglect I’ve come to think neglect Is behind as many breakups As religion, politics or money So who’s to blame? Who get the pups? Sadly (Maybe God’s plan) it’s passion Brings two together bound in lust Instead of friendship growing slow Fed and nurtured by a lasting trust But either way neglect can happen With work the major claim we feel We come home wanting rest and comfort Or break from child raising’s toil So we expect the other’s loving To take the place we abdicate Not realizing weariness in partner The one in courting we’d placate The baby’s fed changed and bedded The dishes done its time for rest Two bodies weary sit on sofa Both hoping love will be the best He thinks she’ll welcome or be seductive She thinks he’ll know how her day’s been And put forth the extra effort And then in bed her heart he’ll win. So both neglect and habit deadens The passions once so strong and true Quietly the marriage mortar Crumbling a union like rotten glue Love the kids? Sure! There’s no question Money? Never, not where it’s at What remains is hurt not passion Something died and that is that. There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Mar |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yep...this certainly tells the tale of many a broken home...neglect of each others needs...such a sad thing you have written here |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Two bodies weary sit on sofa Both hoping love will be the best He thinks she’ll welcome or be seductive She thinks he’ll know how her day’s been And put forth the extra effort And then in bed her heart he’ll win. So both neglect and habit deadens The passions once so strong and true Quietly the marriage mortar Crumbling a union like rotten glue Love the kids? Sure! There’s no question Money? Never, not where it’s at What remains is hurt not passion Something died and that is that. ==================== a very wise man wrote this poem ... and it cuts deep and reaches far ... well done poet sir...once again. later-harsh-reality-gator jm |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There is way too much truth here in this little piece... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I agree with sunshine..... excellent penned as always, Charisma |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well written, and so sadly true. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Excellent!!!!!! The 2nd stanza, especially, is outstanding. It's extremely sad what we lose, and yet again, what we sometimes never even have before it's lost. To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill...I know what you say is true many times..but I feel that love, if it is truly love, keeps on despite times like these as change happens to people, it is inevitable...but love abides. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Paula - sometimes - it indicates two feeling so neglected they fail to see - the love they built their union on - then it's the most sad Thank you Janet Marie- I'm not so wise as experienced _ Thank you Karilea - Charisma - I wish it were not so true - Thank you Interloper - if enough love remains - - sometimes two can see the way to rebuild - Thank you Dreamkeeper- If the foudation is built on sand - that's the worst - Thanks Martie - I somehow knew you'd see see hope in this sad scenario - - I too feel the hope should be there - but finding the way out can be very difficult -Thank you |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Good Bi What a day..! [^@#$%*+]. I feel like Sheol is druged me into an early grave. Somehow after I had read a few lines from a night before I found it, should I say, fascinating because last night I was all ready for today (spiritually alert, wide awake) ready to take on the place. I remember too I was enthusiastic for it to greet me. Now that it’s here and I’ve met you I’m not so sure... However I am trying to be optimistic, looking for the favorable. I guess that’s easy for people as copious as the big Ds. advocates but with my little freedom of verse, I can only confess that I’m a day closer to rest. It’s getting easier to express such gnawing loneliness with phrase, but I suppose it’s better I shan't for this moment. It’s actually been hard for me to keep up an optimism for such futures & what was in it. I originally thought, and still do, that this is a spiritual thing. However, even with my many years of Biblical experience, I’ve gotten slushy and in no way ready for such an incident. In fact I don’t believe I thought this kind of rivalry could’ve happened and I regret you ever experienced it. Under other circumstances I could have maybe thought it could be likened unto such. But as it is an adversary has again been thoroughly articulate. if you found the time I thank you and if not all the same good bi thank you Bill for your honest words you've been an honest friend good friends best finds thanks, dale [This message has been edited by lucky (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
For a reason unknown to either my husband or me, we have both been cut off at the same time, from posting any new poetry at Passions. But for some reason, we are allowed to continue contributing comments. So I must say, if we are cast out, good-bye, my friend! We care about you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
straight to the point and sad |
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