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Seeking the Fickle Click
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Seeking the Fickle Click |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Seeking the Fickle Click I had been seeking the fickle click the one that distributes the years for I had rubbed out time again and again let it walk by me as I pretended not to gathering splinters as I held on to it wishing it to stop pestering my skin stop all those balloons that float around me and demand I count each one. I had listened to my dear heart wish around corners skip all the cracks in sidewalks climb the brown satin trunk of a manzanita and hold there a leaf past time. You know what I’m talking about yes this walk into the park where all the games run bases and fall through circles onto the pavement to bounce bubbles into the silk sky and another one has past and who has written the reason with some chalk across my driveway? There are reasons somewhere I know for I wrote them myself once and put them somewhere safe I think beneath my thick skin or nestled in that cardboard box where lucky keeps his heart safe And here I was with my big hands trying to push away destiny and searching my circumference for importance and laughing at my own folly and then I got down on my knees looking for my spent tear and found one Johnny jump up growing in the crack of the cement and coloring my eye with the perfection of a minute. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful and honest heartfelt writing Martie ...just a fab job!! Can't avoid some things and maybe we souldn't ....take care my dear poet friend.....ethome.... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
'You know what I’m talking about yes this walk into the park where all the games run bases and fall through circles onto the pavement' Martie...this poem evoked many feelings and images for me...(but what is that tree? A...manzanita?) Sigh...how many times can I tell you the effect your poetry has on me? I get inspired with a desire to write each time I read you... Love K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh Martie ~ Your poetry is simply candy for my eyes...What a beautiful piece this is. Bonnie |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Martie, I'm susprizzzzed they didn't close that park..! Were you on the San Francisco side or Berkeley, did you ever check out Hermosa or Blacks beach..? Yeah I thought so. By the way, you said you could tell me something about Berkeley... Come on now Sis. lucky you... dale |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
quote: this stanza sent me flying. glad you saved it until the end, especially with that "coloring my eye with the perfection of a minute". so beautiful. i love colourful, beautiful words.... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I had no idea what to expect with that title but I got what I should have expected....perfection again  Thank you, Martie...you never disappoint. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I trust you to bring me vividity in every post - You did that and more with this - 'There are reasons somewhere I know for I wrote them myself once and put them somewhere safe I think beneath my thick skin or nestled in that cardboard box where lucky keeps his heart safe' What a quick-think you are.  Just loved this whole piece. And the touch of a Johnny-Jump-Up was so endearing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I read this - and gave my brain a rest - - came back and read again - thought of the splinters I'd gathered, and how many times I'd skipped the cracks, how many rules I'd set for myself - and broken to realize that it's all about why - Why I find beauty in fall color, sunsets, sunrises, Mountain lakes, canyons, waterfalls, and yes - the smallest flower surviving on a well-worn sidewalk. And now I can add - your poetry to the list. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, if I may hold your chalk a moment, you can climb my plum tree...and we will giggle again... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Just adding you to my library... lol don't know why I haven't before... K |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--Yes, you're right...maybe we shouldn't...thanks for the friendship. Kamla...Manzanita is a hard wood tree related to the heaths and heathers, native to southern California ...does that answer your question...thanks for the reply, my friend. Bonnie...Candy...hmmm, wow..thanks! Dale---You are lucky! aurora--thank you so much for reading and for such a sweet reply...I must look for your poetry. Balladeer-- I would never want to dissapoint you...thanks. Marge--You know how endearing you are to me...hugs! Bill--what a wonderful way to let me know you understand my poem...thank you my friend who sees so well! Karelia--I would love to climb your plum and giggle...thanks. Kamla--thanks for coming back, sweets! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, Love the title, different and your poem, well what can I say, that I havent already said or others, your poem took me there right along beside you Martie Loved it Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
martie lots and lots of movement in this to capture and hold interest. it's incredible how you maintain such quality. getting seriously jealous here ....lol philip |
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