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Martie
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0 posted 2000-11-15 08:41 PM



Seeking the Fickle Click

I had been seeking the fickle click
the one that distributes the years
for I had rubbed out time
again and again
let it walk by me as I pretended
not to
gathering splinters as I held on to it
wishing it to stop pestering my skin
stop all those balloons
that float around me
and demand I count each one.

I had listened to my dear heart
wish around corners
skip all the cracks in sidewalks
climb the brown satin trunk of a manzanita
and hold there a leaf past time.

You know what I’m talking about
yes this walk into the park
where all the games run bases
and fall through circles onto the pavement
to bounce bubbles into the silk sky
and another one has past
and who has written the reason
with some chalk across my driveway?

There are reasons somewhere I know
for I wrote them myself once
and put them somewhere safe
I think beneath my thick skin
or nestled in that cardboard box
where lucky keeps his heart safe

And here I was with my big hands
trying to push away destiny
and searching my circumference for importance
and laughing at my own folly
and then I got down on my knees
looking for my spent tear
and found one Johnny jump up
growing in the crack of the cement
and coloring my eye with
the perfection of a minute.





In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2000-11-15 08:48 PM


Beautiful and honest heartfelt writing Martie ...just a fab job!! Can't avoid some things and maybe we souldn't ....take care my dear poet friend.....ethome....
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2 posted 2000-11-15 09:10 PM


'You know what I’m talking about
yes this walk into the park
where all the games run bases
and fall through circles onto the pavement'

Martie...this poem evoked many feelings and images for me...(but what is that tree? A...manzanita?)

Sigh...how many times can I tell you the effect your poetry has on me? I get inspired with a desire to write each time I read you...

Love K


The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S

BSC
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3 posted 2000-11-15 09:14 PM


Oh Martie ~ Your poetry is simply candy for my eyes...What a beautiful piece this is.  Bonnie
lucky
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4 posted 2000-11-15 09:14 PM


Martie,
I'm susprizzzzed they didn't close that park..! Were you on the San Francisco side or Berkeley, did you ever check out Hermosa or Blacks beach..? Yeah I thought so. By the way, you said you could tell me something about Berkeley... Come on now Sis.

lucky you... dale


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5 posted 2000-11-15 09:16 PM


quote:
And here I was with my big hands
trying to push away destiny
and searching my circumference for importance
and laughing at my own folly
and then I got down on my knees
looking for my spent tear
and found one Johnny jump up
growing in the crack of the cement
and coloring my eye with
the perfection of a minute.


this stanza sent me flying. glad you saved it until the end, especially with that "coloring my eye with the perfection of a minute". so beautiful. i love colourful, beautiful words....

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6 posted 2000-11-15 09:53 PM


I had no idea what to expect with that title but I got what I should have expected....perfection again   Thank you, Martie...you never disappoint.
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7 posted 2000-11-15 10:25 PM


Martie~
I trust you to bring me vividity in every post -
You did that and more with this -

'There are reasons somewhere I know
for I wrote them myself once
and put them somewhere safe
I think beneath my thick skin
or nestled in that cardboard box
where lucky keeps his heart safe'


What a quick-think you are.
Just loved this whole piece.
And the touch of a Johnny-Jump-Up was so endearing.
~*Marge*~





~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Wilfred Yeats
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8 posted 2000-11-15 10:35 PM


I read this - and gave my brain a rest - - came back and read again - thought of the splinters I'd gathered, and how many times I'd skipped the cracks, how many rules I'd set for myself - and broken  to realize that it's all about why - Why I find beauty in fall color, sunsets, sunrises, Mountain lakes, canyons, waterfalls, and yes - the smallest flower surviving on a well-worn sidewalk.
And now I can add - your poetry to the list.

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9 posted 2000-11-15 10:57 PM


Martie, if I may hold your chalk a moment, you can climb my plum tree...and we will giggle again...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Severn
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10 posted 2000-11-15 11:15 PM


Just adding you to my library...

lol

don't know why I haven't before...

K

Martie
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11 posted 2000-11-16 12:23 PM


ethome--Yes, you're right...maybe we shouldn't...thanks for the friendship.

Kamla...Manzanita is a hard wood tree related to the heaths and heathers, native to southern California ...does that answer your question...thanks for the reply, my friend.

Bonnie...Candy...hmmm, wow..thanks!

Dale---You are lucky!

aurora--thank you so much for reading and for such a sweet reply...I must look for your poetry.

Balladeer-- I would never want to dissapoint you...thanks.

Marge--You know how endearing you are to me...hugs!

Bill--what a wonderful way to let me know you understand my poem...thank you my friend who sees so well!

Karelia--I would love to climb your plum and giggle...thanks.

Kamla--thanks for coming back, sweets!


Dark Angel
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12 posted 2000-11-16 05:35 PM


Martie, Love the title, different  

and your poem, well what can I say, that I havent already said or others, your poem took me there right along beside you Martie    

Loved it  

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

Poertree
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13 posted 2000-11-17 05:02 AM


martie

lots and lots of movement in this to capture and hold interest.  it's incredible how you maintain such quality. getting seriously jealous here ....lol

philip



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