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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
The way You look into a puddle To determine If it’s still raining, Look into my eyes-- You’ll see How I still love you. The storm still rages Within; The rain clouds Continue to gather. There’s no end in sight. Everything falls apart Around me-- Yet it all stays in place As I lose my patience With you. I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Snowpants, No do not lose your patience. Keep working hard and the end result will always be worth the effort. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done. One of the fruits of the Spirit is long-suffering. Hang in there. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
sp, Be strong my friend and do not give into the storm within. The love you possess is stronger yet. You just have to have faith. Best of luck to you. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
sp...sorry but I think there are times you need to lose patience...to tell them...its NOW...now or never...love shouldnt be made to wait... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kris- i agree with Paula. I think that if someone truly loves someone, then it will be...and if not then sometimes we have to move on and carry on with our lives even though it is very hard. i know you, and i've seen the strength of character you possess. you are a fighter and have a beautiful heart. you are also a wonderful friend, so i am sure that you are a wonderful lover as well. i wish you the best of luck in this. know that i am here for you and if ever you need to ô¿ô feel free. my "door" is always open. take care. ~amy~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The way You look into a puddle To determine If it’s still raining, Look into my eyes-- You’ll see How I still love you. The storm still rages Within; =========== SP...this is EXCELLENT!!! what a cool use of metaphor here... and so much impact and emotion spoken in a few well chosen words... very well written... and the truth found in those last lines is profound ... we get stronger as we live it.. and as we write it out ... take care jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
SP~ this is perfection! I love this, I'm feeling this way myself. Excellent write.  -SEA |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Great work here, definitely!!! I say, let the storm rage!!! I definitely agree that patience is a virtue.....but there are times when you should just let go and take a stand!!! Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Daniel: thank you, my friend, for your thoughts and stopping by!! Interloper: yes, I know!  Thanks!!LW: thanks! I'm trying, I'm definitely trying!! Paula: thank you! I am so glad you said that!  Amy: you are a wonderful friend, girlie! Thank you for your encouraging words, as they are needed always, especially today! Love ya!  ô¿ôJM: wow! Thank you for your kind reply! I am so glad you liked it!! SEA: perfection, eh? thank you so much! pepper: thank you, my friend. you are right. patience is a virtue, if the right time! I appreciate your thoughtful reply!! sp I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...very good write |
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