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The Distance Between Sighs
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The Distance Between Sighs |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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The Distance Between Sighs somehow when the stars hang like that in ninety degree angles above your head across the bed in glow, the painted posies just seem so flat, they're green against the blue of you in lighted times as this, and the stretch of skin between us clumsy, the curl of pages worn alone, somehow wakens my insides a pungent smelling salt effect the situation has on me and the distance between sighs,... screams done. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Wow! I just don't know what else to say to this........  -SEA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh,....my!..... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Spitfire ~ Please tell me what motivated this piece. I am torn in my reading ... don't know where to go. It has mezmerized me. Help! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ One powerful piece of thought ... 'a pungent smelling salt effect the situation has on me and the distance between sighs,... screams done.' Just WOW'ed .... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the distance between sighs. . . is a breath. . . which is what I had to take after reading this. . . superb. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Surperb, my friend. jwesley |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful intense and thought provoking reading...very very good work!! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
I must admit that I'm withe veryone else here, and I can't think of a thing to say... Spitfire, understand that this is such a good thing. WOW doesn't describe this for me... but OH! Followed by a few sighs certainly does. You have composed saddness SO subtle and enchanting... and the awakening of senses, spirit, and ... and... OH! *sigh* and the stretch of skin between us clumsy, ~ I am in love with this line. THANK YOU for this read. ~ Beth |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Spitfire-Have to admit to reading this twice, getting a different meaning with each read, but both seem to capture a sadness and also a passion that used to be, very nice write. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Wanted to thank all you sweet people for reading and commenting. You make my heart smile. I'd write more but I'm short on time and wanna read some of the others before it's back to my paper. Anyway, thank you, thank you!  . *Peace. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SpitFire, That distance can seem like an eternity my friend. This was awesome you. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
somehow when the stars hang like that in ninety degree angles above your head across the bed in glow, ======================= and the stretch of skin between us clumsy, the curl of pages worn alone, somehow wakens my insides a pungent smelling salt effect the situation has on me and the distance between sighs,... screams done. ============= you have this amazing gift for expressing so much emotion and adding a poetic kick in the butt of IMPACT ... and doing it all in a few very well chosen and very poetically spoken words ... in other words...YOU ROCK ...  awesome work here!!!! later-less is way more-gator jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh ...wow |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Stumbled onto this and realized just how much I miss reading your work. Simply amazing. |
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