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I die a thousand deaths
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Mendy Junior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 34 |
I die a thousand deaths And this table stands between us This conversation All this chatter and polite lies I die a thousand deaths With no need to wonder why I am chained Trapped between your wishes and my pain I am walking with gentle beasts Oblivious I am drowning Treading water I am sinking as I float This street is a procession These sounds the dirge of dying souls This circle moves with us Surrounding us with silence I only hear your voice This carriage is my coffin And as we say goodnight My body lives While sighing I die if it is true that the world talks toomuch then let us all keep quiet and hear the eloquence of silence - Richard Ntiru |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sounds like someone is really not paying attention Mendy...welcome to Passions.. that's a very intense and highly expressive poem you've sent to us thank you....ethome |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
quote: Hi Mendy and welcome to Passions. Your poem is so painful, and I really liked those lines that I quoted here. Good work. Elizabeth |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Mendy, Welcome to Passions. You show deep hurt, please remember to hang in there. I have my arms around you, one BIG hug. Cheers. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
excellent images, metaphors, relaying of emotion.... very well done! nice to meet you here on the blue pages you have just inspired me... "on the blue pages"... gonna write that title... thanks much for a very worthwhile read and i'll be looking for more  [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, welcome to Passions, keep writing. You have a fine talent for expression. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Mendy welcome to passions. this is a heartbreaking piece you write, but you do it quite beautifully. i will be looking forward to reading more from you. take care and again...welcome ~amy~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I am walking with gentle beasts Oblivious ================== Welcome! I look forward to your growth ... and your healing. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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FlyHigh Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 84Bekkestua, Norway |
"I die a thousand deaths With no need to wonder why I am chained Trapped between your wishes and my pain" Nicely written. Break free, girl. Break free. gJ -- "Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish." Ovid (BC 43-18 AD) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome to our world...what a sad hurtful write...hugs |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this |
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