Open Poetry #10 |
Better Days |
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
On one warm September morning while the owl was flying home and the light turned into wonder I somehow came to know. You were my special flower in the greenhouse to my soul and beyond those darker hours I would only watch you grow. Everytime I look around I see you growing leaps and bounds and everytime you call my name I hear the love we knew explained and when we lean upon the evening hours I know the time we need is ours to share these better days. In the search for worlds of freedom there were times you were alone I did'nt know your heart was bleeding while I was far away from home. But I knew that you'd need shelter still I could'nt see your time and you were lost beneath my cover while I was fading from your mind. Then on the lines of talk that found us your conversation spiraled down and all the reason I confounded began to shatter all around. In my struggle to be viable every day designed your fears So I searched a new perspective which unfolded bold and clear. We were more than bedroom lovers before this world of needs appeared so on a bridge across the water I crawled to you in tears. Now everytime I look around I see you growing leaps and bounds and everytime you call my name I hear the love we knew explained and when we lean upon the evening hours I know the time we need is ours to share these better days. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think my favorite line is... lean upon the evening hours... but then there was another line, and another line... so I ended up like the WHOLE piece... and smiling {~,^} Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This brought tears to my eyes.......so beautiful...my gosh......so beautiful -SEA |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, this is magnificent, such a piece is this. I really love this one, it has such wonderful lines, well all of it is wonderful. But if I had to choose so on a bridge across the water I crawled to you in tears Marvellous writing, and it made me sniff as I tried to pretend I'm not crying. (I'm at work and my team already get away with murder.) Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You were my special flower in the greenhouse to my soul ============================ Perfect. Wonderful. Magnificent. 10,000 adjectives! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Oh - this is such a fragile offering - Resplendant in beautiful thoughts. 'I somehow came to know. You were my special flower in the greenhouse to my soul and beyond those darker hours I would only watch you grow.' *Sighhhhhhhhh* I hope you can tell that this is destined to be read again and again and again. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Well done I really enjoyed this read. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sunshine I'm glad you got caught on the other lines also...really appreciate you taking the time to read. Sea I'm so glad you could stop in for the read I know you dropped a tear in a good way..ethome Maesha really not trying to make you cry at work but thanks for reading and thanks for the wonderful comments....you have a heart that bubbles over with such love. Hey interloper thanks for taking the time to read and for the kind thoughts Marge...thanks for the word resplendant I am so complimented by that...thanks so much for the rest of your fine comments. Seymour...so glad you took the time to stop in and read...much appreciated...ethome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In the search for worlds of freedom there were times you were alone I did'nt know your heart was bleeding while I was far away from home. But I knew that you'd need shelter still I could'nt see your time and you were lost beneath my cover while I was fading from your mind. Then on the lines of talk that found us your conversation spiraled down and all the reason I confounded began to shatter all around. In my struggle to be viable every day designed your fears So I searched a new perspective which unfolded bold and clear. We were more than bedroom lovers before this world of needs appeared so on a bridge across the water I crawled to you in tears. =============== Oh I adore this one.. and it is CLASSIC Ethome poetry.... I see so much of the music that never stops playing in your head ..in your poetry... it is what sets your work apart ... and lands it in my poetry loving heart. "In the search for worlds of freedom there were times you were alone I did'nt know your heart was bleeding while I was far away from home. But I knew that you'd need shelter still I could'nt see your time and you were lost beneath my cover while I was fading from your mind." oh my...what an amazing verse that is... jm ********** I'M ALIVE Jackson Browne from the Cd "Im Alive" It's been a long time since I watched these lights alone I look around my life tonight and you are gone I might have done something to keep you if I'd known How unhappy you had become While I was dreaming of you With my heart in your hands And I was following though With my beautiful plans Yeah now I'm rolling down this canyon drive With your laughter in my head I'm gonna have to block it out somehow to survive 'cause those dreams are dead And I'm alive I want to go where I will never hear your name I want to lose my sorrow and be free again And I know I've been insane When I think of places I could have been But I was dreaming of you With my heart in your hands And I was following through With my beautiful plans Standing here by the highway side Watching these trucks blow by Inches from my face Yeah thinking 'bout the time I've wasted And the pleasure we once tasted Looking up and down this road I've been here before Can't be here no more Yeah now I'm rolling down California five With your laughter in my head I'm gonna have to block it out somehow to survive 'cause those dreams are dead And I'm alive |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey! Janet VANtastic! thanks for the classic word and finding a space for it in your poetry loving heart...gotta love ya kiddo.. and thanks for the Jackson Browne lyrics they are real good ones....your poet friend ethome |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
the greenhouse of my soul.. loved that line.. and enjoyed the whole poem ethome.. as always.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ethome* Such tenderly beautiful thoughts...this is so delicate and soft...I just adored it...into the library for sure!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Victoria thanks for your comments esp the one about the greenhouse....appreciate it very much. Butterflies you are so kind...I'm so pleased that you and that wonderful romantic heart of yours enjoyed....take care...ethome |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A very tender and warmly written poem of love.How beautiful it is. Bomeone special wil keep it close to her heart Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--it is so easy to be touched by your poetry, for I have been by all of them, and this one is a jewel..Janet is right about the music of your words...now...what do those back up singers get to sing... shoo do be do be do shoo do be do be do shoo do e do be do whaaaa I've been practicing. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, I've come out of the vaults but I still need some beauty. And here is just where I need to stop off for some. I said it was one amazing poem, it is, wonderful, beautiful and I love it. I have got one small niggle, just a tiny moan, if you Mark and Kari, keep using up all my superlatives just where am I going to find more. I can hardly go and trade for them can I? I'd look pretty silly trying to trade some well used wonderfuls and amazings' for a box of unused absolutely perfects wouldn't I? Oh well whatever, I'll just have to throw in some super specials I suppose. (You can tell I'm a little whimsical tonight, I know.) Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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FlyHigh Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 84Bekkestua, Norway |
As Marge said, this will be reread a few times.. Good one... =) gJ -- "Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish." Ovid (BC 43-18 AD) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yes I can just hear you singing this one...the music in your soul just pours through this ethome...wonderful from start to finish |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Elizabeth for your kind remarks and for reading...ethome Martie get that voice tuned up and get ready for the tour... bright lights and big crowds .. can't help but be successful with the Blue Moons backing me up.....thanks for your sweet remarks....ethome Thank you Marsha ...I'm sorry about the superlatives..I just stole them from you without thinking...I would give them back but now everybody's using them...thanks for the encouraging remarks and for letting your hair down here....ethome |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
loved this! |
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