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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"Broken Promise" The moon cannot befriend in me at once aloft and shining there What price, this consolation's fee of promise past in ivory stare For wishes waged in glowing's swell in vain were tossed into the sky Through vapor's fingers wishes fell and rained instead a loathsome lie That gentle souls with hearts to share need only fling to skies above In moments weak and in despair worn ache for pride and promised love Rainydays |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Definitely a most well written poem on such a sad subject... Regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hugs for this... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Sudhir, thank you for taking the time to read and respond. Sunshine, thank you...it's just a poem, though. I am fine. Hugs to you for being so dear. Rainydays |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moon cannot befriend in me at once aloft and shining there =================== For wishes waged in glowing's swell in vain were tossed into the sky ===================== That gentle souls with hearts to share need only fling to skies above In moments weak and in despair worn ache for pride and promised love ================= Another beautiful piece from you. your poetic vocabulary is wonderful. makes for such "pretty poetry" this style of writing is one that I have yet to learn ..but wish too... it is my favorite style to read. take care jm "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" Lao Tze Tao ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Rainydays~ this is excellent writing  -SEA |
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