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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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Your glowing hand slowly massages your perfect neck, Gently rubbing the knots away, one simple move after another. You slowly remove your glasses to relieve strained eyes And set them carefully on the desk. Sensuous hands move upward to your wild hair, Pulling at idle strands, and sliding through thick, delectable locks. I cannot resist these unconscious movements, These tempting habits that you so unknowingly possess. I rise from my post at the table, Crossing the room so quietly, My feet scuffling softly on the plush carpet. I embrace your enrapturing form from behind, Cuddling your sleepy-eyed head in my arms, Pushing away those loose strands of lustrous hair. Responding to your trusting smile, I lift your delicate body from the desk seat And carry you softly from room to room. Passing through living room and bed, we travel farther, To the door, and onward Into the storm shocked air, and our balcony, To watch the dance of the lightning, And the bright full moon peak through the clouds |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MAN...... this is amazing...swoon to the moon  no..seriously..this is excellent.. you captured this intense moment wonderfully for the reader... the sensual nuance of this is perfection I enjoyed this much ... take care jm |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Beautiful poem... it's always lovely to sweep away in passionate moment without a word spoken, and this one's expressed in your descriptions vivdly. Nicely written. I enjoy your poetry much. -Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Janet- Thankyou for being so enthusiastic about it, makes me smile! *grins* see... Poeminister- It very much is one of the better parts of life. Thanks for your comments. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Well, I don't know if my lady would like that up around Alberta....... kinda' cool you know... maybe in the summer though. dale |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
To watch the dance of the lightning, And the bright full moon peak through the clouds .... O My! EXCELLENT WORK... regards, sudhir |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Masked Intruder, I guess if I would say "Yeah what Janet said" it wouldn't be much of a respone huh?  Very romantic and sensual poem.. I loved it.~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've taken exquisite care in weaving a tender sensual moment...this is so beautiful!! Every moment played out to perfections~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You did'nt end up where I thought you were going to and doing what I thought you were going to do but you did end up ....great write! I think everyone gets attached to the little things that make one human but still adorable, you describe them with such a warm poetic flair.......have a nice day..ethome |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're really quite the romantic, Philip... Nice job here..  |
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