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lucky
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0 posted 2000-11-13 06:43 PM


Said a wiskey flask to a cigaret,
“I’d like to make a good-sized bet
That I can get more scalps than you,
Although your victims arn’t so few.”

Said the cigaret to the wiskey flask,
“Well, that’s as easy as I could ask,
For I give kids their downward start,
Then you pitch in and do your part.

They come to you with a burning thirst,
But I’m the fella that sees ’em first;
So most of 'em should count for me,
I’ll take the bet; it’s a cinch d’ see?”

Then the wiskey flask came to say;
“I never looked at the thing that way.
But I confess you spoke the truth;
’Tis you that tackles the foolish youth—

You fill their system with dopy smoke,
I mound ’em into a first class soak.
We work together far to well
To quarrel for even a little spell.”

So, the wiskey flask and the cigaret
Shook hands together, called off the bet,
And away they sauntered, side by side,
hunting for victims far and wide.

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Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am.
To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight.
-Marge Tindal


[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 11-13-2000).]

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Celeste
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1 posted 2000-11-13 06:54 PM


Outstanding perception in this!   Wonderful flow.  I applaud!!



To capture and live a moment is truly living

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2 posted 2000-11-13 06:58 PM


lucky--your whimsy is full of truth...and sad truth at that...this is great!
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-11-13 07:24 PM


Lucky~
WOW !
What a powerful message wrapped up in
a neat little package.

I really like it.
What a worthwhile message.

( Have you ever been accused of having
socially-redeeming value before ? )

Love ya', poet man !
~*Marge*~


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4 posted 2000-11-13 07:42 PM


I found this a bit humorous sorry if it wernt meant to be. But a good message in here to

Sometimes you have to let go and move on,
But never let go of the memories.


lucky
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5 posted 2000-11-13 07:58 PM


All right I must confess... pour me another glass and tell St. Peter I'll be late... I have to have another cigaret...

dreamkeeper thanks for the applaud!

Martie your so whimsy...love ya Sis

Marge Tindal,
Thank you and no to... ( Have you ever been accused of having socially-redeeming value before ? ) Is it anything like that "Infusion" stuff..?
Love you, poetgirl !

Maria, a bit humorous, huh..? Sometimes you have to let go and move on, but never let go of the cigarets.

thank you all, dale


Wilfred Yeats
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6 posted 2000-11-15 11:09 PM


I'm with Marge withe respect to:

"( Have you ever been accused of having
socially-redeeming value before ? )"

A sad smile here - 2 towards a hat trick


lucky
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7 posted 2000-11-15 11:56 PM


Bill,
I'll give you and Marge a double bump for being on top of it. Yes, it's a very old poem from way before even your time. My mother sent it to us in a Mag. from 1914 and I thought to post it. Wasn't intending to steal. Sorry 'bout that... I should have said something. Good eyes my friend and good looking out. This work is listed Untitled... You guys are still really great. I still like to see who's who around here. Hats off, Bill & Marge.


[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 11-15-2000).]

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