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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Crust of Moon Labor of another day Sunlight splashed room, Insistent, inevitable Like phases of the moon. Bring on the buzz Whirligig beetles in June. Lunar vanishing Sings a familiar tune. Questions crystallize In clouded mirrors of blue Transported from fog Waning does imbue. Voices of the ancients Whisper of taboo, But demands of the day Render thoughts untrue. Only when the starlight Catches the mind unaware Truly know the distance Between here and there. The face collapses No longer hiding despair. Lay awake for tomorrow Pretending not to care. © 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 09-23-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very nice to see another one of yours pop up. I love the way you ended this in it's final verse. The whole piece is superb in flow and presentation. Only when the starlight Catches the mind unaware Truly know the distance Between here and there. The face collapses No longer hiding despair. Lay awake for tomorrow Pretending not to care. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Questions crystallize In clouded mirrors of blue Transported from fog Waning does imbue. Voices of the ancients Whisper of taboo, But demands of the day Render thoughts untrue. Only when the starlight Catches the mind unaware Truly know the distance Between here and there. The face collapses No longer hiding despair. Lay awake for tomorrow Pretending not to care. ============== very COOL poem C,.. i love the title.. and the cryptic feel of this one ... added to the unique imagery made for a very pleasureful read.. way cool...way  jm |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Beautiful work, enjoyed the read. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Mark, you are too kind, thank you. JM, thank you! It was a response to another poem, kinda-sorta. Thank you, Seymour! Corinne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Only when the starlight Catches the mind unaware Truly know the distance Between here and there. The face collapses No longer hiding despair. Lay awake for tomorrow Pretending not to care. Wow beautiful piece Corrine, I sense both great joy and sadness within the verse. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, as always, Corinne! Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you very much, Brian! Denise, thanks! Corinne |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nighttime can do that to one....great writing, Corinne |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ I saved this one for this morning - The title is so intriguing - 'Lunar vanishing Sings a familiar tune.' What an interesting concept - 'Crust Of Moon' Something in it speaks to me. I'll have to figure out why.  I so enjoy reading you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Balladeer! Marge, you are too kind. The feelin's mutal, poetress! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, another wonderful piece by your amazing pen. Laced with creptic meanings.. Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautiful work, Corinne... Always a pleasure to read your works... Regards, Sudhir |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Only when the starlight Catches the mind unaware Truly know the distance Between here and there. The face collapses No longer hiding despair. Lay awake for tomorrow Pretending not to care Corinne, I had reflections of days and nights passing in the phases of the moon, and the numerous thoughts that can sift through the soul. Very much enjoyed. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-16-2000).] |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Very nice. Great flow. I enjoyed the read. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Everyone (nearly) has copied your last verse - so I won't altho I could - You should know from this - the genius you exposed with it, and how many hearts and minds where you struck a familiar chord - myself included |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh moonbeam me up scotty this was great! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
love wayoutwalts response haa..nicely written.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very nice read, Corinne ... ditto on the last verse |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very beautifully written verse The title is enticing and the poem is captivating. And very unique. Well done Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you all for your very sweet words. Corinne |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Corinne, Some really great phrasing in this one, great imagery too, I love the theme and the way you wove it altogether. Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Corinne, Fabulous title. It's such a pleasure reading anything you post, every piece is so well written. I like this especially because of it's somber wistful undertones... just and overall wonderful piece. And I LOVE the last stanza. ~ Beth |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Irish Rose and Elizabeth Cor! Corinne |
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