Open Poetry #10 |
Shadows |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Calm, the after-shadows of all yesterdays having passed in a tense culmination to get the day beyond itself and we feel so superior to those who came before us, because we are in the here and now, with times "better" for some and "so-so" for others. We would take it all back Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in today's light, trying to grasp the hand of the clock as it ticks by and by and by losing grasp of all reality in a moment of time as it whisks by in a blink of an eye and with the rise and fall of a breast's breath. Would we give it all away Beckoning are tomorrow's shadows so faint but we do see them in the sparkling light of today, chanting "tomorrow, tomorrow" as fervent hope looks forward to a bright future as all hopeful people are, in like with their dreams that won't die to see a calm in their tomorrow that will only visit their yesterdays after the panic. There, light eternal in shadows ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 27 September, 2000 |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
in the shadows. . . we see. . . wonderful my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--stunning truth, wonderful writing! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ This is stunningly beautiful ! 'Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in today's light, trying to grasp the hand of the clock as it ticks by and by and by losing grasp of all reality in a moment of time as it whisks by in a blink of an eye and with the rise and fall of a breast's breath. Would we give it all away' And are we in format unison this evening or what ???? Doesn't surprise me ... probably not you either ! This is really a work of word art. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
karilea-- " it whisks by in a blink of an eye" ... great line.. and indeed it does and again another... " that will only visit their yesterdays after the panic." whew! EXACTLY! "There, light eternal in shadows"- excellent close!!! " that just about says it, doesn't it thank you, my poetfriend for sharing this with us... YOU are very special ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beckoning are tomorrow's shadows so faint but we do see them in the sparkling light of today, chanting "tomorrow, tomorrow" as fervent hope looks forward to a bright future as all hopeful people are, in like with their dreams that won't die to see a calm in their tomorrow that will only visit their yesterdays after the panic. There, light eternal in shadows The setting of our tomorrows being so much dependent on the foundations of our todays are so equally important as both may lie in the shadows waiting for the kiss of warmth from the sun of our dreams. Wonderful write my friend. |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Sunshine, Beautifully written and so true. It seems we are always looking "backwards" at our shadows when it's the shadows that we cast ahead of us that determine our tomorrows. And a probably silly observation by the way... is it just me or are the hourglass shapes of your stanzas representative of your touching upon our perceptions of time's passage? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sunshine~ Stunning! not only in format but in content as well. you have captured the essence of time and shadows perfectly in this gem! Excellent writing m'friend! Take care, Amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
WOW. What lovely responses...I am greatly touched by them all...far too much praise for so early in the morning, I'm going to have to tread very carefully in order to do as well with any future posts...I greatly treasure all of the adjectives used to describe your feelings over this one... format, words, were all used to identify what so clearly is so easily lost... Sven, Martie, Marge, doreen, Mark, rascalx, Aimster, thank you all for reading and understanding... and for your lovely, thoughtful comments... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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chitsank Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 88 |
Thanx for posting such A lovely poem. U've good sense of ryhtym. and the lines flow from one to another with great ease. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...yes there is, most certainly |
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