navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #10 » Shadows
Open Poetry #10
Post A Reply Post New Topic Shadows Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2000-09-27 08:50 PM


Shadows

Calm, the after-shadows of all yesterdays
having passed in a tense culmination
to get the day beyond itself
and we feel so superior
to those who came
before us, because we are
in the here and now, with times
"better" for some and "so-so" for others.

We would
take it
all back

Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in
today's light, trying to grasp the hand
of the clock as it ticks
by and by and by
losing grasp
of all reality in a
moment of time as it
whisks by in a blink of an eye and
with the rise and fall of a breast's breath.

Would we
give it
all away

Beckoning are tomorrow's shadows so faint
but we do see them in the sparkling light
of today, chanting "tomorrow,
tomorrow" as fervent
hope looks
forward to
a bright future as
all hopeful people are, in like
with their dreams that won't die
to see a calm in their tomorrow that
will only visit their yesterdays after the panic.

There, light
eternal in
shadows


©Karilea Rilling Jungel
27 September, 2000


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Sven
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-09-27 09:24 PM


in the shadows. . . we see. . .

wonderful my friend. . .

----------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
2 posted 2000-09-27 09:31 PM


Karilea--stunning truth, wonderful writing!
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2000-09-27 09:43 PM


Karilea~
This is stunningly beautiful !

'Frantic, the shadows so clearly stand in
today's light, trying to grasp the hand
of the clock as it ticks
by and by and by
losing grasp
of all reality in a
moment of time as it
whisks by in a blink of an eye and
with the rise and fall of a breast's breath.

Would we
give it
all away'


And are we in format unison this evening or what ????
Doesn't surprise me ... probably not you either !

This is really a work of word art.
~*Marge*~




~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



doreen peri
Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
4 posted 2000-09-27 09:56 PM


karilea--

" it
whisks by in a blink of an eye"

... great line.. and indeed it does

and again another...

" that
will only visit their yesterdays after the panic."

whew! EXACTLY!


"There, light
eternal in
shadows"- excellent close!!! "

that just about says it, doesn't it

thank you, my poetfriend for sharing this with us... YOU are very special    

~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry ~


Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-09-27 10:15 PM


Beckoning are tomorrow's shadows so faint
but we do see them in the sparkling light
of today, chanting "tomorrow,
tomorrow" as fervent
hope looks
forward to
a bright future as
all hopeful people are, in like
with their dreams that won't die
to see a calm in their tomorrow that
will only visit their yesterdays after the panic.

There, light
eternal in
shadows

The setting of our tomorrows being so much dependent on the foundations of our todays are so equally important as both may lie in the shadows waiting for the kiss of warmth from the sun of our dreams.

Wonderful write my friend.


rascalx
Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA
6 posted 2000-09-27 10:51 PM


Sunshine,

     Beautifully written and so true. It seems we are always looking "backwards" at our shadows when it's the shadows that we cast ahead of us that determine our tomorrows.
     And a probably silly observation by the way... is it just me or are the hourglass shapes of your stanzas representative of your touching upon our perceptions of time's passage?

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
7 posted 2000-09-27 11:23 PM


Sunshine~
Stunning! not only in format but in content as well. you have captured the essence of time and shadows perfectly in this gem! Excellent writing m'friend!
Take care,
Amy


"The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences"

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
8 posted 2000-09-28 08:35 AM


WOW.  What lovely responses...I am greatly touched by them all...far too much praise for so early in the morning, I'm going to have to tread very carefully in order to do as well with any future posts...I greatly treasure all of the adjectives used to describe your feelings over this one...

format, words, were all used to identify what so clearly is so easily lost...

Sven, Martie, Marge, doreen, Mark, rascalx, Aimster, thank you all for reading and understanding...

and for your lovely, thoughtful comments...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


chitsank
Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 88

9 posted 2002-08-13 03:34 PM


Thanx for posting such A lovely poem.
U've good sense of ryhtym. and the lines flow from one to another with great ease.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
10 posted 2004-04-18 07:27 PM


wow...yes there is, most certainly
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #10 » Shadows

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary