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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Rather Mine Hold me -- not merely with your arms, but in the echoes of your trembling. There, I find my voice -- fulfilling a divine call, a cry drenched in the fever of your need. Yet, whose need is it that earns soothing, yours for the want of me, or rather mine. For I'm much less without you -- my wealth only comes in giving. Your hands were formed to guide me, your eyes fashioned that I might see beyond myself -- your heart pulses, that I might know the number of steps in my day. Your breath warms my ears, its fragrant language -- a treasure -- manifested from the walks of your journal's garden. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Well done Robert, This is a terrific poem. Keep up the good work. "your heart pulses, that I might know the number of steps in my day". Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very loving and warm poem full of romantic pulses ...well done!! .....ethome |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Robert Joseph...this is truly beautiful...soft and warm |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Robert Joseph.... "...my wealth only comes in giving..." Oh, this is so very beautiful, and I can't help but admire one with such an honest heart.......  Follow your dream! |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
in the ultimate "drama queen fashion"  WWWOOOWWW take my breath!!!!!!!!!!!!!! kidding Robert, heehee Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Daniel, ethome, Paula, Sunny, and Annie... Thanks for reading, I value each response! Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
your heart pulses, that I might know the number of steps in my day. Such beautiful words Robert..would melt any womans heart.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Robert- truly beautiful poetry you have penned here. a wonderful look at your heart. "Your hands were formed to guide me, your eyes fashioned that I might see beyond myself -- your heart pulses, that I might know the number of steps in my day." BEAUTIFUL! I truly loved this. Take care. ~amy~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I had wondered at the title, and found it in the work... which pleased me... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
RJ~ this took my breath away......*SIGH* this is gorgeous! -SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph...this is beautifully romantic...loved it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Robert! Denise |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well done. Great write, Robert. Wish I'd said it. jwesley |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Perfect romantic poem, Robert. Sandra |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, Amy, Karilea, SEA, Martie, Denise, Jwesley, and Sandra... Thanks to you all, each reply is greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Don't want to be left out in saying that this is beautiful. But I'll add that I also feel the strength of your words is amazing and that the philosophic aspect of the work is completely fulfilling. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
R J... looooooooooooooong sigh to this... Two things which jumped out at me: 1: It looks like you wrote this in Garamond Font and if not then something akin to it - I only ever write in Garamond...lol, it just looks so much better... 2: I like the technique of asking a question that evolves into a statement... 'Yet, whose need is it that earns soothing,' Yes, that technique likes me...(and I like repetition lol) This poem is another one worthy of much praise Robert...tell me - have you been published? Are you submitting if not? K< !signature--> The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Masked Intruder, and Severn...Thanks for the generous responses!! Robert Joseph |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
My second read of your work, and my second time to be well pleased with the reading. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Heart stopping style, love it. Corinne |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Jamie, and Corinne -- Thanks so much, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 11-16-2000).] |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
soft, fanciful, and enjoyable. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how sensual I enjoyed the oldie here |
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