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Robert Joseph
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0 posted 2000-11-12 11:51 PM




Rather Mine


Hold me --
not merely with your arms,
but in the echoes of your trembling.

There, I find my voice --
fulfilling a divine call, a cry drenched
in the fever of your need.

Yet, whose need is it that earns soothing,
yours for the want of me, or rather mine.
For I'm much less without you --
my wealth only comes in giving.

Your hands were formed to guide me,
your eyes fashioned that I might
see beyond myself --
your heart pulses, that I might know
the number of steps in my day.

Your breath warms my ears,
its fragrant language -- a treasure --
manifested from the walks of your
journal's garden.


Robert Joseph
  ~enb~



© Copyright 2000 Robert Joseph - All Rights Reserved
Daniel J D
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1 posted 2000-11-13 12:00 PM


Well done Robert,
This is a terrific poem. Keep up the good work.

"your heart pulses, that I might know
the number of steps in my day".


Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

ethome
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2 posted 2000-11-13 12:38 PM


Very loving and warm poem full of romantic pulses ...well done!! .....ethome
Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2000-11-13 12:50 PM


Robert Joseph...this is truly beautiful...soft and warm
Sunnyone
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4 posted 2000-11-13 12:55 PM


Robert Joseph....
  "...my wealth only comes in giving..."
Oh, this is so very beautiful, and I can't help but admire one with such an honest heart.......


Follow your dream!


A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
5 posted 2000-11-13 01:42 AM


in the ultimate "drama queen fashion"

WWWOOOWWW  take my breath!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

kidding Robert, heehee


Look within the heart of a poet, and you will see a reflection of their soul.

Robert Joseph
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6 posted 2000-11-13 09:45 AM


Daniel, ethome, Paula, Sunny, and Annie...

Thanks for reading, I value each response!

Robert Joseph

Victoria
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7 posted 2000-11-13 09:51 AM


your heart pulses, that I might know
the number of steps in my day.

Such beautiful words Robert..would melt any womans heart..

               ~Victoria~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
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Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-11-13 10:37 AM


Robert-

truly beautiful poetry you have
penned here. a wonderful look at your
heart.

"Your hands were formed to guide me,
your eyes fashioned that I might
see beyond myself --
your heart pulses, that I might know
the number of steps in my day."

BEAUTIFUL! I truly loved this. Take care.
~amy~


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2000-11-13 01:47 PM


I had wondered at the title, and found it in the work...

which pleased me...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




SEA
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with you
10 posted 2000-11-13 03:15 PM


RJ~ this took my breath away......*SIGH* this is gorgeous!   -SEA
Martie
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11 posted 2000-11-13 05:28 PM


Robert Joseph...this is beautifully romantic...loved it!
Denise
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12 posted 2000-11-13 08:30 PM


Breathtakingly beautiful, Robert!

Denise

jwesley
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13 posted 2000-11-13 08:36 PM


Well done. Great write, Robert. Wish I'd said it.

jwesley

catalinamoon
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14 posted 2000-11-13 09:13 PM


Perfect romantic poem, Robert.
Sandra

Robert Joseph
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15 posted 2000-11-14 01:15 AM


Victoria, Amy, Karilea, SEA, Martie, Denise, Jwesley, and Sandra...

Thanks to you all, each reply is greatly appreciated.

Robert Joseph

[This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 11-14-2000).]

Masked Intruder
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16 posted 2000-11-14 01:33 AM


Don't want to be left out in saying that this is beautiful.  But I'll add that I also feel the strength of your words is amazing and that the philosophic aspect of the work is completely fulfilling.
Severn
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17 posted 2000-11-14 03:32 AM


R J...

looooooooooooooong sigh to this...

Two things which jumped out at me:

1: It looks like you wrote this in Garamond Font and if not then something akin to it - I only ever write in Garamond...lol, it just looks so much better...

2: I like the technique of asking a question that evolves into a statement...

'Yet, whose need is it that earns soothing,'

Yes, that technique likes me...(and I like repetition lol)

This poem is another one worthy of much praise Robert...tell me - have you been published? Are you submitting if not?

  K
< !signature-->

The wind shifts like this:
Like a human without illusions...
This is how the wind shifts:
Like a human, heavy and heavy,
Who does not care.

W.S


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-14-2000).]

Robert Joseph
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18 posted 2000-11-14 10:53 AM


Masked Intruder, and Severn...Thanks for the generous responses!!

Robert Joseph

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
19 posted 2000-11-15 11:11 PM


My second read of your work, and my second time to be well pleased with the reading.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Corinne
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state of confusion
20 posted 2000-11-16 09:31 AM


Heart stopping style, love it.

Corinne

Robert Joseph
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21 posted 2000-11-16 10:20 AM



Jamie, and Corinne -- Thanks so much, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece.

Robert Joseph

[This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 11-16-2000).]

aurora rain
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22 posted 2000-11-17 11:48 AM


soft, fanciful, and enjoyable.  
passing shadows
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displaced
23 posted 2004-04-18 08:30 PM


how sensual

I enjoyed the oldie here

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